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I liked this little interlude from the detective series. Short enough to enjoy without going through withdrawals if you are not able to finish the whole fic in one go but long enough to keep you interested. Great work :)

Very sweet story. I like the psychological half-journey of Marcus, and how the clues are there for the crime, but the impending murder wasn't obvious (at least not to me). Oliver's motives were original and interesting, but seemed reasonable at the same time. Draco is perfectly in character. The Ron rumor didn't make sense to me, but maybe that's because I never read the Reluctant Detectives or Expectant Detectives.

If you expanded this short into a story it would make more sense and be more fulfilling.
Maybe lead in with a chapter or two of Hermione's time in Bulgaria, making the reader think she's there for university and studying, leaving hints about her being not what she seems. Then a chapter where she meets Marcus in the bar, then a couple chapters on their interactions (even if they revolve around the dentist's office). Then a few chapters on Marcus getting a funny feeling about Draco and maybe thinking that he sees Snape/Hermione around and so he's not sure Hermione's grieving state makes sense. If you combine Draco's attempt at murder with Oliver's, making it a quidditch conspiracy that Draco includes himself in for one reason or another, the whole story would be connected rather well through the thread of Oliver/quidditch. Make the time period for the story consistent and shorter, perhaps less than 6 months

Good ideas. The Bezoar fillings were very ingenious.

What a wonderfully constructed mini-mystery. Love how it was from Marcus' viewpoint. Sort of reminded me of how Sherlock Holmes would use Dr Watson to draw out a killer.

This one shot was really good!

loved the story and the writing....clever, different and wonderful

just one minor critic...'metal' kept being used..I think 'Medal' would have been a better choice of word....

That was just outstandingly, quirkily, stellar. I love the way your convoluted mind works. I love the story and that it wasn't centered solely around a romantic plot as 900 percent of these stories seem to be. I didn't realise that I would enjoy one so much. I very nearly didn't find this little gem. Thank you for sharing the things in your head. It's highly entertaining.

~Mia

I hane never written a review but I really enjoy reading your stories. I also love mysteries and this was a great one!

Ok, here is my review.....Nice story;-)
Ok, here is the real one, well written, loved the ending great twist there. Can't wait for the next story.
Love all your stuff:-)