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for Holy Water

by ariathel

schedule February 4, 2013 at 12:00 AM

I think you have an excellent story here, one which I would dearly love to see continued.

The dynamic you established with Hermione and Draco in their relationship is very intriguing. And while I understand why you had to write Severus out the way you did, it also seems as though you weren't quite certain what to do with the story once you had eliminated him as a deterrent to the developing intrigue.

I was also very interested in the changes you wrought in Lucius while still staying true to him as a character. Your depictions of Narcissa through Draco's eyes were also superbly rendered.

I would dearly love to read the remainder of this tale, should you choose to come back to it in the future.

Thank you for sharing with us, and happy writing!

schedule April 28, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Love long chapters....... And is wonderful that you return to finish this story. They are getting involved without knowing it which is wonderful!
person jade2099
schedule January 18, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Brilliant story! I honestly believe Hermione thinks herself in love with Severus, but it's one of those things that comes to light after the person is gone. It would be the same grief she'd have felt for Ron or for Harry - even though they weren't intimate. It's sad to see Severus go, but in the end he knew his time was coming and he died to save his friend. A more noble death than JK gave him. lol I look forward to seeing Hermione mend...and Draco becoming more of a fixture in her life. Look forward to the next update too! :)
person mhaj78
schedule December 30, 2009 at 12:00 AM
AHHHHH thank you for the update! I just reread the whole story since it had been a while and I LOOOOVE it!!! Please keep working on it, even if it's slowly, that's okay! The detail is awesome, the writing is smooth, and the plot is fantastic!
schedule December 22, 2009 at 12:00 AM
One thing that I missed on this chapter was the tissue alerts!!!!!! OMG, yes this was very intense and wonderful. So please do not be a stranger, because we need more........
schedule December 22, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Sorry to hear you have been having such a hard time. Hope you are doing better after the surgeries, not to mention the death of your friend. I'm amazed you are back to writing, but maybe that offers some catharsis. As to the new chapter, I was so glad to see it on the list of updates, & dove back in, starting with chapter 1 again. Such intensity. Feel for both Hermione and Draco, at this stage. Am eager to see how it continues. Best wishes.
schedule December 22, 2009 at 12:00 AM
hello,

it's nice to see you update again. poor hermione, it's a shame only a few people understand her. i can't wait to see how hermione and the malfoy's recover. thanks for your update, it was worth the wait.

jillian
person alina290
schedule November 15, 2009 at 12:00 AM
You need to put me on your list for when you update this I get to know about it. I like very much where you are taking this story. Please send me a heads up. lizalya13@yahoo.com
Liz
schedule November 12, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Liking the story so far. Am re-reading before starting the newest chapter: may I question a word choice that is bugging me? After the wedding, there is a comment that Draco & Hermione had had a meeting that was "terse and hurried". I don't think a meeting could be terse. It could indeed be hurried, and any words exchanged at the meeting could be terse, as in sparse & to the point. I'm sorry to be so picky, but both times I've read this I've come to a halt at this point, initially thinking maybe "terse" was a typo for "tense", then going back & thinking maybe you meant a short & hurried meeting, & finally deciding the phrase referred to the amount of talking that went on... in any event, whichever was meant, it's not good for readers to stop to get distracted from the flow of the story by small stuff. Anyway, on to chapters 2 & 3. Can't wait to see how this develops.
schedule November 12, 2009 at 12:00 AM
OOOH! The gloves are off, the courtship battle is formally on. I'm really enjoying the openness in all this. Was Draco's declaration of his intentions part of his plan, or spontaneous? I do think a Beta would help a bit with occasional grammatical slips, but the story is great. Love the interactions. Lucius' new incarnation has comic potential. The Weasleys & Harry are behaving well so far. Your reasoning on the religous side makes sense to me. Am eagerly awaiting more.