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by starstruck86

person talley
schedule November 22, 2009 at 12:00 AM
That was full of squee! Yet frustrating. These two have got to get together. lol I liked the Italian and pink robes and the little pinch. The glimpse of his former lover. And a very nice and subtle reminding of who Ron is, in his mind, when his mother mentioned they sometimes wondered that he didn't believe them when they said they loved him. ***my heart ached a bit there*** Now Ron's off with George. Will these two ever get together? Or more importantly when????
person HarryVik
schedule November 22, 2009 at 12:00 AM
so know Ron knows that Sev is interested, Sev knows Ron is interested. SO why in the world are they still not getting into action. Thickheaded men, hopefully that changes soon.

Good chapter can barely wait for the next update.
person kai
schedule November 21, 2009 at 12:00 AM
nice title! everyone does want ron!! ^_^ yay! i liked that the first one to hit on ron was the ex but he went away when he wasn't wanted. then the italian, nice. XD

also, was that McGonagle that found them or someone else. but either way, awesome!! I see matchmaking & locking them in rooms or something happening here. HAHAHAHA...

please update soon!!
schedule November 20, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Da-da-da dun. I have a feeling Severus and Ron are going to be given helping hands in getting them together, whether they want them or not. Loved the pink robes of the Italian, and I loved Severus' jealousy over so many of the situations.

I'm glad he finally got a clue that Ron is interested. For heaven's sake, the man was a spy, how could he miss the signs? But we all know that he would never think that Ron is interested in him because he has such a poor self-image. Ron needs to do something about that too.

I was so happy to see the new chappie, but am still hungry for more. (I've been so hungry for more that I'm re-reading Seraphim. I still just love that story.)

Thanks for the update, and I hope things are going well. Things are fine here with the hubby and all, so it's all good.

T
person Lady Zombie
schedule November 20, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Aarh! These two...I tell ya. Sooo infuriating! I feel like shouting "Just fucking fuck already. You know you want to."

LOL @ sneaky peaky Sprout and petulant Snape changing the Italian's robes pink. How do you come up with this stuff?

Looking forward to more.
person hairsprayX12
schedule November 20, 2009 at 12:00 AM
At this point I'm not sure who is more frustrated with Sev, Ron or me...lol...

You are killing me here but...what a way to go

Can't wait for the coming explosion!!
person HarryVik
schedule November 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I can't wait for next chapter. I love your Snape/Ron fanfic, i am going to look at your livejournal today. Keep up your work and i hope to read more soon. Thank you and good luck.
person kai
schedule November 13, 2009 at 12:00 AM
oh no!! misunderstandings all around!
but that was hot before it went all bad!!

i see something happening with that italian, hmmm....
person talley
schedule November 13, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I enjoyed reading the ball and their preparations for it. Laughed at drunk Harry. Enjoyed those two finally getting together. Hurt to think of Fred and George. Hate how Snape doesn't stop to consider how his actions look. Poor Ron feeling all rejected. Why is that boy alone? Poor thing.
schedule November 12, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I enjoyed the new chapter. I was glad to see the progress, but sad that Severus once again messed it up. Will these two ever get on the same page? I hope they do.

The dance with Harry was hilarious. You described it perfectly. I also liked Stalking-Snape. That would be just what he does when he was in enomoured with someone.

Thanks for the update. I will wait (im)patiently for the next one.