rate_review Reviews

Try running this story through a spell-checker.

Please, please, please, I beg of you, stop writing run-ons. They are the sign of an incompetent author, and for someone who has your talent, it just makes you seem careless.

Spellcheck is your friend, and grammar is its constant companion. Meet, greet, and learn to love both. The story is riddled with grammatical issues, and it's distracting from the reader.

And what's with the markings before the actual story portion. They really are unnecessary. They're just distracting.

Love the concept though.

Death.