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Wow this is a great story! you should really update soon.

i think something is wrong with the site or something i am dying to read the next chapter but i cant seem to get it past chapter 6 it is all that is showing up! it is very fursterating can you looking in to it? sorry to ask you but i dont know what to do. aslo do you post at any other site-- you could try you might get even more people to read your story! i know lots of people would love the story! could email me and tell me what to do about why it wont go past the 6th chapter! :) thanks and sorry to trouble you, my email is princesscrystalcitten@yahoo.com

Love it so far. I can just see Ron doing something very stupid when school is back in session though.

yeahhhh an update:-)..... and this was not boring.... so what if it wasn't full of action it was still an important chap we needed that transition for the next chap i am sure it will be interesting... and i am soooo looking forward to it

Please update soon I loved it and cant wait to see what happens between Hermione and Lucius.

LOVE IT!!!!

I've been reading the fic and I think you do a nice job of showing the evolution of a relationship. Also the development and growth of the individual - learning to think for yourself and overcome barriers. So good message. Some minor con-crit: as you don't seem to have a beta, ensure you give it a good once over yourself to look for errors (don't rely on spell check).

Also, can you explain why Draco uses "cara"? He's not Italian so it's rather challenging to read, I can deal with a bit of OCC but that always throws me. Last point, good note that the baby would flutter at 4 months but there would be no kicking. The little one would not have developed enough for that. No one would feel the baby move other than the mom until he was more fully developed. Then the kicks or bumps would be felt intermittently and not, as it would appear, on command. For me and many friends, the kicking would happen when you're still or resting then all of a sudden there would be movement.

Again, the above is minor con-crit. Nice job all around though. :-)

LOVEDIT
KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK

Love this story line. I have never known what to think of the Veela story line, but I decided to give it a try, and I loved it!!! please tell me there is more to this??

no i loved the chapter!!! besides life always needs some contentment and peace cause face it usually life is full of troubles trials and everything in-between! :) i sure do hope that you will be posting the next chapter and soon or i might just go crazy!! i do hope that narcissa is wonderful to hermione cause she will need someone and it would mean lots to have her as a friend or even like a mom. :) well it will be very interesting to see what is going to happen next with all the malfoys.
Question though i would think that they would want a wedding and a big one cause one they would not want a baster child (unless the veela bond is like one) and that it would strike me as a big social thing that they would love. okay question is--is their going to be a wedding? :)
PLEASE POST SOON!!! :) Again great chapter! :)