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very beautifully done i absoloutely love it :D

very nice very very nicve I would love to read more just to see where you take this,

I like your story so far, but I think you try to have too many mysteries going on at once. Have you ever heard the expression about too many cooks spoiling the soup? Well, it's kinda like that. It doesn't make the story bad, per se, just confusing and a bit hard to keep up with. I'm not sure what kinds of creature blood Harry has in him, but I'm sure one of them is Veela and another is Fae of some sort and I suspect Vampire as well. You said five though and I can't figure out the other two. My other complaint, besides there being too much going on at once, is that you don't seem to give adequate background on anything, like telling what the other creatures are (Eiri, Nastusia, Harry's rapist). It seems you're overdoing it trying to pack as many things into the story as you can, but never enough of anything to make things clear or even entirely coherent. Maybe some more detail about what's going on? Or try to clarify some of what you've already written before you try to pile on anymore surprises? Your spelling and grammar are almost perfect though.

Hey, would you please email me at raineynight713@gmail.com when you update again? I think your story is amazing! =D

Sooooo need chapter 10!!!

I love your story. There is so much in it though, I am not sure I can keep up, but I trust that it will all be clear in the end. I can't wait for you to update. Thankyou.

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I LOVE IT!! The parts of the story are original which I LOVE, but I also love the parts that are not so original. The way in which you present them is capitavating. Can't wait for more!!

yay, yay, yay, love and want more!!!

This fic is so confusing and so full of plot holes that I don't even know where to begin with questions. You jump around the story way too much introducing scenes and scenarios and OC's and situations that only you problably understand fully. Where I am sure that you have readers who don't care about how easily a story flows, I do. I just can't keep up. Maybe it's just my bad, lol. I realize that this is your first story so I would encourage you to continue. If you were to add more detail to your scenes and finish one idea before moving on to something entirely new in the plot, that would be helpful. Just a suggestion. Please take this as helpful critiquing and not a flame, okay.

I love this story!!!! Please update soon.