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Sound story line, but Severus is a bit out of character as well as Albus. That's not necessarily a bad thing though.

Sorry to hear about your back pain I suffer from it occasionally myself and I know how horrible it is I hope you feel better soon. I really enjoyed this chapter I thought it was funny when Ron had his faced slashed by Hermione but what about Dumbledore really showing his age there lol. I will be eagerly awaing the next chapter thanks so much.

Sorry to hear that and hope it's over for you soon. I loved this chapter and just have to say that Dumbledore is an interfering old busybody and I can't wait to see what stupidity Ron gets into. I will be eagerly awaiting your next chapter. Take care of yourself and thanks for such a quick update.

Not bad, however the story moved really fast. The Dark Lord is dead in four chapters. This may be fine because you now have the Hermione/Severus relationship to work on. I still see lots of room for back stories, deceptions and motivations. You have the opportunity to broaden this story horizons. Here's a little trick I do when writing, I write the chapter off the top of my head then save it. A day or two later I read it and see how it looks with 'fresh eyes'. I don't know if this is helpful to you, and I am enjoying the story. I just want you to look back and have something that you enjoy. When I started writing I had a wonderful alpha reader who pointed out plot holes and nagged the shit out of me. She told me that when a person writes and tells a story that words are used to paint the picture. All senses have to be stimulated with words to create atmosphere. Is a room dark and stinky? Tell us that! Just how dark is the room? Describe the smell... etc How happy was someone? How did it show? I'm sure you get the picture.

Again you have a great premise, so run with it!

Happy Writing! :)

I am just loving your story I have been reading this and I just can't help but beg for more so thanks for the story and PLEASE PLEASE update soon or I just may start having withdrawal symptoms lol thanks once again will be eagerly awaiting the next chapter.

Very interesting start, I am looking forward to read more.

I think you titled this rather well; it is strange, but an extremely original take on an A/U scenario. I also like Egyptian history, and no, as far as I know Bastet was not married to any of the other gods, but she did have a bit of a reputation as the defending mother lioness as well as the party goddess.

Oh wow this story is awesome! Keep up the great work, I can't wait to read the next chapter. :)

Very interesting premise. I look forward to more.

The interaction between the gods and Severus as well as the two goddesses was interesting. I do think the chapter would have been better with more description and it could use some fleshing out. This is such an unusual fiction I'd like to see it go far.