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October 4, 2009 at 12:00 AM
wow that was an interesting chap... i am glad that the weasleys did not get off and i think it is funny that ginny had a little outburst like that... i am glad that harry and luna got together i think that is so sweet
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October 4, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Well it certainly sounds like justice has been done but the story's not over yet. Of course there's a wedding to look forward to, but I'm not sure how smoothly everything will go. Well done!
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October 1, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Twins how wonderfull... But I feel this is not over yet .. I mean the danger for these tow.. more please
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September 30, 2009 at 12:00 AM
This is an interesting story, I have a couple of issues with the story. One issue I have is Pansy calling Draco, "Drake". I know several writers have used this nickname. A Drake is a male duck. I can not see Draco, who would know his name means dragon allowing any one to call him a duck. I am aware that several writers also try to give Hermione nicknames, but JK Rowlings never had any one call Hermione by anything but her full name.
The second issue I have is Hermione would still think of herself as "Hermione" as this is the name she has thought of herself for 17 years. She would have problems with adjusting to her change of status. She would still remember how the Slythern boys treated her at Hogwarts, and would be slow to forget. Her change of blood status would not cause her to trust them, do to the discrimination she suffered from at Hogwarts.
Ron would be an eye opener but then she would start to think of him like she does most of the other pureblood. Even though healers can use potions and charms to heal broken bones, the bruises and swelling still takes time to heal. She would still suffer physical and emotional pain from her being beaten. This would be especially rough as it came from someone she trusted.
Blaise is not a dark Italian. JK Rowlings discribes him as A"tall black boy with high cheekbones and long, slanting eyes." He is of Italian and African ancestry. His mother is described as A "famously beautiful witch" who "married seven times." Each of her wealthy husbands died a mysterious death, leaving her a lot of gold. There for if Hermione is Blaise's twin sister she would be of the same ancestry. With a question about i how her father died, and would she trust such a mom?
If her "adopted" mother is a witch and married a squib she would not have had to lose her magic, she could only not practice magic in front of muggles. It was Snape's father that was a muggle, but Snape was aware of his background. He knew he was a half-blood, and was going to attend Hogwarts. Hermiones "adopted" parents would have known Hermione would be going to Hogwarts. They would have been aware that the odds would have been high that Hermione could have been sorted in to Ravenclaw due to her intelligence or Slytherin due to family back ground. We know from the book that the sorting Hat debated between Ravenclaw and Gryffindor for Hermione and she selected Gryffindor. Yes, twins and family members do not always go into the same house. I question that the sorting hat would have been fooled by a glamor spell as it looks at the essence of the person.
Your story is a fun read and I know you are not following cannon. You have shown creative and I hope that you continue writing. Please do not regard this as a flame. I hope I have given you some things to consider for your next story, after you finish this one,
The second issue I have is Hermione would still think of herself as "Hermione" as this is the name she has thought of herself for 17 years. She would have problems with adjusting to her change of status. She would still remember how the Slythern boys treated her at Hogwarts, and would be slow to forget. Her change of blood status would not cause her to trust them, do to the discrimination she suffered from at Hogwarts.
Ron would be an eye opener but then she would start to think of him like she does most of the other pureblood. Even though healers can use potions and charms to heal broken bones, the bruises and swelling still takes time to heal. She would still suffer physical and emotional pain from her being beaten. This would be especially rough as it came from someone she trusted.
Blaise is not a dark Italian. JK Rowlings discribes him as A"tall black boy with high cheekbones and long, slanting eyes." He is of Italian and African ancestry. His mother is described as A "famously beautiful witch" who "married seven times." Each of her wealthy husbands died a mysterious death, leaving her a lot of gold. There for if Hermione is Blaise's twin sister she would be of the same ancestry. With a question about i how her father died, and would she trust such a mom?
If her "adopted" mother is a witch and married a squib she would not have had to lose her magic, she could only not practice magic in front of muggles. It was Snape's father that was a muggle, but Snape was aware of his background. He knew he was a half-blood, and was going to attend Hogwarts. Hermiones "adopted" parents would have known Hermione would be going to Hogwarts. They would have been aware that the odds would have been high that Hermione could have been sorted in to Ravenclaw due to her intelligence or Slytherin due to family back ground. We know from the book that the sorting Hat debated between Ravenclaw and Gryffindor for Hermione and she selected Gryffindor. Yes, twins and family members do not always go into the same house. I question that the sorting hat would have been fooled by a glamor spell as it looks at the essence of the person.
Your story is a fun read and I know you are not following cannon. You have shown creative and I hope that you continue writing. Please do not regard this as a flame. I hope I have given you some things to consider for your next story, after you finish this one,
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September 30, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I'm enjoying your story. please continue.
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September 29, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I was expecting it to be Ron but Draco is a wonderful alternative. Thank goodness Silver is alright and so are the babies - Twins - OMG! Like that though, a reflection of what Siler and Blaise were meant to be. :)
And Ginny and Ron really have lost the plot, totally off the planet - I hope they never get out but since I don't know how much longer you have to go on this story, anythng is possible. :) Another aww moment for Blaise and Cassie - permission to court her - Awwwwwwwwwwwwww! LOL Well done!
And Ginny and Ron really have lost the plot, totally off the planet - I hope they never get out but since I don't know how much longer you have to go on this story, anythng is possible. :) Another aww moment for Blaise and Cassie - permission to court her - Awwwwwwwwwwwwww! LOL Well done!
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September 29, 2009 at 12:00 AM
oh yaaahhh it was draco thank god!!!! i was so worried that it could be someone else.... wow so they are having twins... draco is so sweet how he stayed with her and did not leave her side... i sooo hope that ron and ginny do not get off on a light sentence and i am glad that harry used lucius and celso they are very influential people and would be able to make things happen that he could not... i like blaise and cassie their relationship is very sweet
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September 28, 2009 at 12:00 AM
ok so harry finally knows the truth and i am glad that he is decicing to do something about it... i think you are improving on your smut scenes the more you write the better you will become i think i know that i would not be able to write them i do not think i could do it... :-) so pansy has finnally gotten to silver i hope that they find her...
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September 28, 2009 at 12:00 AM
ok so you are going to update tomm RIGHT!!!! a cliff omg now what is going to happen i have been trying to think of who is there but i have NO clue.... draco is good he was able to get the info from selene and i can not believe it they got pansy too.....
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September 28, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Just when I thought things were looking good and we had everything wrapped up, you go and drop a cliffy like that! That's just nasty - you naughty author, you! LOL Now I hope we don't have to wait too long to see exactly who Silver is looking at. I'm hoping it is Ron, and Draco and co are going to get there just in the nick of time to pulverise him - well send him to Azkaban, I want him to auffer, not get snuffed out.