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Write more it's good

wow!!! this is really good! please email me when you update it! i can't wait to see what will happen next!

And what will they find? Soooo need chapter 4!!!

Cool story!! Looking forward to the next update!!

you are so evil for stopping there lol when will i learn not to read storys that are not finished lol i love it though T_T


~eros

While reviewing your fic, why not add the commas, question marks, etc you missed the first time around? Oh, and remove the ones you placed wrong, please. It was a nightmare to read.

You have an awesome story beginning. I love the intrigue. I don't mind the AU of ignoring from Sirius' death on. I like it very much so far. I am very interested in where you are going to take this story.

My one issue would be to get a beta, if you don't already have one. I saw some mistakes that would typically make me not want to continue reading, but that is where your storyline has drawn me in. Lily's name is misspelled at least once. I'm going on only the third chapter right now. Other grammatical errors aren't as bad such as your instead of you're or there instead of their. Words that go through spell check, but mean something different grammatically. I would personally volunteer except I know I would go insane if I add anything else right now.

I really do want to see where your story goes, so please take this as constructive, because that is how it is truly meant.

and because the fangirl in me just has to come out...I WANT MORE NOW. *grins*

Hope Remus found everything!!! Sooooo need chapter 3!!

Severus Snape. S N A P E. Not Snap.

ha! awesome! i really love it and can't wait for more!