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June 22, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I love the Emmet/Draco/Harry because I think Emmet is way hotter than Edward. I don't know how to get updates when you add a new chapter so please let me know when this is updated. I hate a Hermonie and Harry pairing but this is your story, maybe make her 1 of his children bearers sluts!!! lol to knock her off as a know it all. Thanks for the entertaining story its really HOT!!!;)
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November 4, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Hi
I love ur story I was curious as to where severus was in all of this?
heres my email:ravensemaj2000@yahoo.com
I love ur story I was curious as to where severus was in all of this?
heres my email:ravensemaj2000@yahoo.com
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February 17, 2010 at 12:00 AM
i like. i think Harry/Draco/Emmett/Jacob would be hot
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October 15, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Well, Harry in a skirt is hot. So there. Anyways, loved the chapter, and can't wait for more! So... Update soon or die, yes? LOL, j/k. But still, TRY to update soon, at least. I have to go to bed now.
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October 13, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Bout time you updated! Dammit! Well, I don't have time to read it right now, lots to do, school crap, ear lavage and urine catch and all those wonderful things I have to memorize... Yuck! But anywho, I will read it when I have the time, hopefully BEFORE the weekend. I'll leave another review for you when I've read it.
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September 12, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Wait, I'M on your reccomended reading?! How sweet! Thanks! And I saw that you liked Children of Atum. Did you read the latest chapter? Harry in a skirt... MMM...
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September 5, 2009 at 12:00 AM
So, Emmett is going to be in a threesome with Draco and Harry? I thought he was with Rosalie? I think Harry/Draco/Edward would be hotter. Or maybe Harry/Draco/Jacob. Even better: Harry/Draco/Edward/Jacob. YUMMY!
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September 3, 2009 at 12:00 AM
This is shinjifukushima from LJ. Incase ya didn't know. :P
The biggest problem I really see is a bit of switching tenses. Its not that big of a problem but I would recommend looking for a beta who is willing to go over everything for you. They really do come in handy those betas! I don't know what I would do without mine. I can beta basic stuff but I really suggest looking for someone who is a bit more adept like I did. Not only is it good for the story but she helps me when I question certain grammar situations and it is helping me better myself.
If your unsure as to where to look, just go into my LJ and look at my user profile, My Nightmare, and see the communities I am a member of. In there is a community called hp_betas_wanted. Just fill out the form they give you and someone will get back to you on the story. Other than that I say the only other problem I didn't quite like is that you don't really space out your switches of persons. In that I mean at first its Harry then its someone else then its back to Harry without really any warning and that can be a bit confusing. A simple
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To indicate the change is all that is needed.
Beyond that I like the idea of the story. I love crossovers and especially with Twilight. I'm currently working on a Harry/Edward crossover myself. I think your doing a pretty good job. You have the idea which is great and the rest of it will come later. :)
The biggest thing I can say is just keep with it. Even if you get down a bit, don't give up on it. Especially if a beta super corrects it because in the end you can use whatever knowledge you gain to make an amazing story that much better.
The biggest problem I really see is a bit of switching tenses. Its not that big of a problem but I would recommend looking for a beta who is willing to go over everything for you. They really do come in handy those betas! I don't know what I would do without mine. I can beta basic stuff but I really suggest looking for someone who is a bit more adept like I did. Not only is it good for the story but she helps me when I question certain grammar situations and it is helping me better myself.
If your unsure as to where to look, just go into my LJ and look at my user profile, My Nightmare, and see the communities I am a member of. In there is a community called hp_betas_wanted. Just fill out the form they give you and someone will get back to you on the story. Other than that I say the only other problem I didn't quite like is that you don't really space out your switches of persons. In that I mean at first its Harry then its someone else then its back to Harry without really any warning and that can be a bit confusing. A simple
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To indicate the change is all that is needed.
Beyond that I like the idea of the story. I love crossovers and especially with Twilight. I'm currently working on a Harry/Edward crossover myself. I think your doing a pretty good job. You have the idea which is great and the rest of it will come later. :)
The biggest thing I can say is just keep with it. Even if you get down a bit, don't give up on it. Especially if a beta super corrects it because in the end you can use whatever knowledge you gain to make an amazing story that much better.
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September 1, 2009 at 12:00 AM
...So when do we get MORE?? How bout now, sound good? Sounds good to me. *waits patiently* ...
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September 1, 2009 at 12:00 AM
BUT I KNOW THE VISION!!!! It's [censored], so HA! Aw, damn. I've been censored. LOL. Fine, you win. *sigh*