rate_review Reviews

I lov eit

I damn near cried because of this chapter. Excellent. A good writer knows how to evoke a variety of emotions through their writing.

OH PLEASE! Dont leave me with a cliffhanger! What happens next?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?

good story

Still a lot of spelling and grammatical errors. You also use too many words in some sentences, when they aren't necessary. Pensieve is misspelled. You also need to start a new paragraph when you change speakers. Check here for writing help: http://kamerreon.livejournal.com/ . Kay's one of the best ff authors I know. She's started her LiveJournal by filling it with useful advice on fanfiction writing. I hope you accept my advice. One last thing: Very heartwrenching chapter. I love Cedrry. Please keep going.

Nice start. I like Cedric/Harry. Thanks for that.
I like that he is going to warn them. That means there's a good chance you will be keeping Cedric alive. Please?

I think you meant to say that Harry was 'enveloped' in the light, not 'eloped' (he's not running away to get married in secret you know). OOHH! Cedrry! I love it! And preggers with twins? GAH! OH pretty please show us the night in the Prefect's bathroom. Pretty please? With naked Cedric and Harry on top?

YAY! Another chapter! I can't wait to see what happnes next! Will you also be posting over at hpfandom.net?

I look forward to seeing how this changes things.