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i have a few things to bring up, you said that harry and hermione read dumbledor's diary and yet he seems still clueless as to what the other's read for themselves in the diary, it says very plainly in the diary that seamus and justin were gay but when harry finds them it says he didnt know

good story, it does get tring that ron a jerk in all of your story, when he was good in cannon.

story is bloddy awesome. at first i thought it would be harry with Full Metal Alchemist type power. then i pictured harry snapping his fingers with those awesome gloves and having people burst into flames. (go ray mustang)
but then i thought it over again, and reasised that it would proberly quickly get borring. i read it, and at first i thought there had to be something off, no alchemy for several chapters? but dumbles was made out as an ass, so i kept it up. and i found an other kind of alchemy i've never heard of before. with skeletal keys *whos usefullnes excapes me, if he can't use them to get into forrin places, whats the point?*(i then thought; "he problerly knows whats he's doing" and kept on) and slave rings who make higher levels of alchemy possible. shortly after i though. "just how many slaves must nicolas flamell have had to make the Philosopher's Stone"
so far a amusing story, you are a bit quick in the inducing of new girls, but that can be overloked due to the decent plot. and sex scenes are nothing to celebrate, but passable. rons death, major plus. git needed to die, and you made it gruesome:)
there was also a few gramatical errors here and there, but it was still easily read and didnt really matter.
a good job, which i hope you will soon add other chapter to.

Great story, awesome new aproach to Dumbeldore. Spelling needs a little work - as you said you are not the greatest speller, and also who cares we know what you mean. Overall good story one of my favorites so far. This is one of the storys that has actually made me think about how much of a bad friend Ron was and that he really diserved what happened to him in this story. Nice addition of Luna and Susan, looking forward to who you add next. Alchemy...brilliant, can't wait to see what you do with that. When you do something you may want to actually write about the attack on the castle, that seems like it would be fun. Great story hope to be able to read more and hope you have fun with it to. CONSTRUCTIVE criticism time! Seems that your scenes with Harry and his ladies making love is a little lacking, such as it is all over a little to fast, not sure how you could correct (not really correct...but add) Hope your muse comes back to you as reading other peoples stories helps me with ideas for a couple of my projects. Have to say you are by far one of my favorite authors.

Here comes trouble!!!!!!!!!!!!! LOL

Hot and full of surprises!! More please

Very nice :)

Glad you changed that little bit I mentioned before. The story is coming along very well, can't wait to see what's next.

Great chapter, I was wondering how Harry was going to get the slaves. :D

Great chapter mate, I'm glad that you took in my idea about Dumbledore's diary, and let use know what was in it.

I like how Hermione ask Luna right out how she felt about Harry.

I can't believe what the ass Dumbs said about Luna, and done to her. Also about Neville and the rest of them.

PLEASE update soon

that was great ... im glad mione dumped ron.. please please update soon... later for now

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