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He is in for the surprise of the lifetime.. lol.... Oh this is getting hot hotter.

Hi, Well I finally got a chance to look at your fan fic. I will admit two truths about myself; 1)I really enjoyed the first HP movie, though I am sure it was condensed, and 2)I haven't read or seen anything else on the subject except for an SNL skit starring Lindsey Lohan as Hermione after puberty hit. Luckily for me these two instances allowed me to realize the mythology of HP and incorporate the sexual situations you are trying to establish. This also puts me in a position to review your work in an authoritarian manner rather than someone who completely understands the lore. Having said that:

First off I would like to say that you have an uncany ability to write for men as well as about them. The scenes aren't overly emotional yet the sexual tension is palpable. This is exactly how I write. Also I think you depict the dances with the perfect amount of detail and imagery. Some people do not understand "theatre of the mind" but the visual directions you gave were perfect without trying to explain every feature and nuance. I am so impressed by your artistry that I would suggest that you may want to pursue an entire line of fan fic outside of HP dedicated entirely to Exotic Dancing. Maybe having a club where all the greatest female (and perhaps male) characters meet. But try to keep the Incredible Hulk and Marry Poppins out of those. They both creep me out (lol).

I also have a great suggestion for how Hermionie and Draco could meet. My favorite table-top Dancing scene was from Robert Rodriguez' "Dusk Til Dawn" where Salma Hayek comes out to scilence with a huge snake draped over her shoulders and dances on a table for Quentin Tarentino. Perhaps she could use some type of location spell to show her the hidden wizard and she dances over the table tops to where he is seated.She see's it is Draco, a man she hates and he finally comes close to women he lusts over yet cannot truly know due to the mask. It would be a great way to increase the sexual tension as well as through a wrench in the story. However I hate notes so I understand if you disreguard this. It just means I am paying attention.

Anyway, keep adding to it. I think you have a good I dea brewing here.
-kevin

Wow! That's really all I have to say. Imaginative plot and you've pulled it off perfectly... I can't wait to find out what Draco does when he eventually discovers that it's Hermione that he's lusting after! :)
Looking forward to the next chapter!
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I'm truely and utterly hooked on this story! Draco/Hermione is my favorite HP pairing and I adore the way you are keeping their personalities so constant and mature. I read this whole thing in one sitting! Please update soon. You are doing an excellent job!

Loved the two updates that you uploaded while I was out of town. I bet Draco will notice a similarity to Hermione's dancing, won't he? :D