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for I Want Candy

by triz

person Persy
schedule January 5, 2022 at 12:00 AM

Sweet...just like candy!!!!!

person VoraciousReader
schedule July 10, 2009 at 12:00 AM
LOL, she needs to be more specific. Liked it very much,
schedule July 7, 2009 at 12:00 AM
a few mistakes, but other than that, this was very very cute
person katiekrm
schedule July 6, 2009 at 12:00 AM
That was very sweet and cute.
schedule July 6, 2009 at 12:00 AM
this is soooooo cute
schedule July 6, 2009 at 12:00 AM
very cute misunderstanding. It's interesting how Severus deals with the pregnancy and his family--very long-suffering. It might help to rework the candy conversation a bit? I had to think for a while before being comfortable with the conversation, since most people would say they wanted chocolate, a candy bar, or a Snickers instead of candy if they wanted a Snickers bar. Maybe a more candy-ish candy like Starburst (or the British equivalent)? Smarties maybe? They're rather M&Mish type candies in British commonwealth countries.
schedule July 6, 2009 at 12:00 AM
LMAO! That was a pip! Excellent work and I can't wait to read more of your writing in the future!