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for Deserving (Final Chapter)

by tana97

schedule July 13, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I feel like everyone's against Harry here, he does need some allies that, while not 'evil' see the whole slave thing the same way he does. I wonder... would Harry push Kingsley and Draco away if they intervene too much?
person kunitsu
schedule July 12, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Wow I didnt expect Neville to be doing something like that. All I thought was he just told Mrs. Weasly to help Severus out. OK I really thought that Harry was going to make Severus masturbate infront of him, ah what a dirty mind I have

Cant wait for more
schedule July 12, 2009 at 12:00 AM
And there I thought Harry was getting a bit more bearable. :( I just want to kick him in the balls.

Can't wait for the next chapter, moonofthesea! x
person Nikte
schedule July 12, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I feel so sorry for Harry, he is so blind to what is going on, that if he ever realizes the error of his ways, I bet guilty will eat him up, and knowing how emotional he is, I feel that his guilty will kill almost kill him and drive him to do really foolish thing in an attempt to earn forgivness. I really, really want a happy ending, but Harry keeps doing things that are difficult to forgive and forget. Well, I love your story, I think it
schedule July 11, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Another great chapter!!!!!!!!!!!
person Profound Yaoi
schedule July 10, 2009 at 12:00 AM
This story is amazing!
You've done a wonderful job.

I have to say, I hate Harry in this (so far). I usually see him as some kind of weaker... 'being' than Severus in most Snarry fics and the reversal of their roles is wonderful. Even if Harry is a right git! ;)
I hope Severus' friends can make Harry see the error of his ways. I was so hopeful when he let Severus sleep in his bed without touching him.
But the pillowcase over Severus' head when Harry raped him again... that was so sad. I have always liked Severus and never thought of him as ugly... so I was a bit angry at Harry for calling him ugly all the time. But I know his constant degrading of Severus is all part of your master plan! (I hope... otherwise; poor Severus!)
You've established a strong catharsis with your character's and I have enjoyed your story very much! I can't wait to see what happens next!
schedule July 8, 2009 at 12:00 AM
This is getting wonderfully twisted.

So, is this the real Harry, or is he suffering the aftereffects of a curse?

schedule July 8, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I can understand how that would have been hard for you to write, moonofthesea, a very raw issue for many people.

I am positively jumping up and down here wanting to strangle Harry. I'm glad Dennis lost his illusions with Harry but I hope he can claw them back as, of course, I am hoping Harry will sort himself out.

Looking forward to the next chapter. x
person paganwoman
schedule July 8, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Dearest, as the mother of 2 daughters who were born via c-section, I can relate to some of what you were saying. Being a mother is not the birth ritual; its more than feeding a child with your own body. I couldn't breast feed my second child ( I joked that she only wanted me as a friend.)but that did not make her any less precious to me than my first, who I nursed for over a year. I am very close to both of my daughters and the closeness only increases with age. I'm glad you realized that being a mother is more than giving birth. Paraphrasing a poem about adoption: "you din't grow under my heart, but in it." Getting to your story, I can't wait to see how it grows. Harry is slowly becoming less cold and the gradual turn is more realistic than a sudden turn. Keep it up and good luck P.W.
person kunitsu
schedule July 8, 2009 at 12:00 AM
That was a nice plot in getting Severus to stay longer with Harry and the baby. Lovely update