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November 28, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Plaease hurry and get another chapter up. I LOVE THIS STORY. I cant wait to see what happens. I hope harry and severus's relationship continues. You can tell that they love each other and they just dont realize it. This is the first story in a long time that I have actually read all the way through. Great story
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November 27, 2009 at 12:00 AM
oh so sweet, well not the part about Harry being a brat but Richard calling for Sev, so sweet ^__^
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November 25, 2009 at 12:00 AM
wow ... Harry is an ass! And poor Sev
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November 23, 2009 at 12:00 AM
WTF??? I know Harry doesn't like Snape, but POISON!!! Somethings not right... K
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November 22, 2009 at 12:00 AM
First off, this review is not because of the potion that Harry gave Snape, although that is just one more in the long line of things that have gotten me to this point. At the end of an earlier chapter, you wrote that you were trying to be faithful to JKR's story(in the context of getting Ron and Hermione's kids birth order wrong). Although it's nice to see attention to that kind of detail in a story, I'd much prefer those kind of errors over a story that portrays someone as far out of character as this Harry is, as to be wholly unrecognizable.
I think I get where you were going when you set off to write this story - Harry was removed from a loving home and raised in a home that set him a bad example and made him feel unloved. Snape has similar issues, so two dysfunctional men like this could end up with issues when they come together in a relationship. I could even buy Harry having some residual feelings of vengeance toward Snape, but not to the degree that you have painted him, and certainly not for the length of time that has passed in this story. I just don't understand why you would want to write a Harry that is so completely unsympathetic, unlikeable, and unworthy of the forgiveness he has been granted by some of the people around him. The Harry of Jo's books is, above all, a kind person who spends his life trying to do the right thing. This Harry is nothing of the sort - while he has eventually pulled his head out of his own ass when it comes to the injustices around him(something Harry has ALWAYS thrown himself into), he is still completely self-involved, immature, and frankly quite stupid. I don't get why you would want to paint Harry in this light. Him feeling remorse over almost killing Snape as he has come close to here, will never make up for his belief that it is a just punishment to hurt his husband during conception, or threaten his children's lives during the birthing process. Where is his own self awareness, the greatest strength of love that is supposed to be his hallmark, the kid who was brave enough to not only defeat Voldemort but able to admit to himself that his father had been a bullying git in his tormenting of Snape in the memory he saw in the Pensieve? Your Harry is going to have to do a lot more than just start treating Snape a little more kindly, to make up for what a complete and utter jerk he has been throughout the story, and I'm not sure you're going to be able to get there, given the way you continue to write him.
I think I get where you were going when you set off to write this story - Harry was removed from a loving home and raised in a home that set him a bad example and made him feel unloved. Snape has similar issues, so two dysfunctional men like this could end up with issues when they come together in a relationship. I could even buy Harry having some residual feelings of vengeance toward Snape, but not to the degree that you have painted him, and certainly not for the length of time that has passed in this story. I just don't understand why you would want to write a Harry that is so completely unsympathetic, unlikeable, and unworthy of the forgiveness he has been granted by some of the people around him. The Harry of Jo's books is, above all, a kind person who spends his life trying to do the right thing. This Harry is nothing of the sort - while he has eventually pulled his head out of his own ass when it comes to the injustices around him(something Harry has ALWAYS thrown himself into), he is still completely self-involved, immature, and frankly quite stupid. I don't get why you would want to paint Harry in this light. Him feeling remorse over almost killing Snape as he has come close to here, will never make up for his belief that it is a just punishment to hurt his husband during conception, or threaten his children's lives during the birthing process. Where is his own self awareness, the greatest strength of love that is supposed to be his hallmark, the kid who was brave enough to not only defeat Voldemort but able to admit to himself that his father had been a bullying git in his tormenting of Snape in the memory he saw in the Pensieve? Your Harry is going to have to do a lot more than just start treating Snape a little more kindly, to make up for what a complete and utter jerk he has been throughout the story, and I'm not sure you're going to be able to get there, given the way you continue to write him.
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November 22, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Wow, I just didn
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November 20, 2009 at 12:00 AM
You know, that by this time in the story I really hate harry. I don't know if that was your intentions but I really do hate him. I want to strangle him. Anyways, This is really good. I'll keep reading it.
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November 20, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Cannot wait for the next chapter, please update soon!If you do I'll give you a virtual cookie!
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November 19, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Please email me when you update: narcoleptic86@gmail.com
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November 19, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Oh damn! What did Harry do??? oh... I hope you update soon, cause this is a really mean cliffhanger...