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ok harry is monster, neville is good guy.but still i don't like neville and can!t imagine snape and him.i want harry and severus get back together soon please.i want happy snarry final.

Can someone please hit Harry! He's such a jackass if he can't see he's hurting Severus by saying all of that! He pisses me off, He acts like a brat at time. Anyways, sorry for my little rant there, I loved the chapter and good for Sev, he's not marrying Neville just like that. Update soon!

It may be a good idea, when you decide to write another story, to incorporate something like the information that Poppy reveals about Severus' need to be controlled, in a more consistent way. If she knows this about him, she would have recognized that this part of him was responding to Harry in their relationship, and she likely wouldn't have been as harsh towards Harry as she was. Similarly, if you're now trying to explain away Harry's behavior with the little blue pills, it would have been more effective for us to see him taking them prior to becoming more aggressive - there is a writing technique called "show, don't tell" Here you are telling us this is the reason for Harry to have acted the way he did earlier, when we needed to be shown it earlier. You could still explain it here, but it wouldn't be coming out of left field as it is now. Also, that may account for his nasty behavior with Snape sexually, but it wouldn't account for his general nasty behavior and his complete unwillingness to listen to everyone else in his life that he loves and respects. I still don't see any motivation in your story for Harry to be such a jerk, unless you intentionally want one of your main characters be someone that has almost no redeeming qualities. Why should we care what happens to him, or want Snape to end up with him, when we have yet to see him recognize or take ownership of anything that he's done wrong, or attempt to grow? Time for some resolution to be shown in his thoughts and actions, not just more dysfunctional behavior, like his attempts to make Snape jealous here.

I so hope Harry and Sev get back together soon... I love this... K

Excellent writing, excellent chapter. But what a nerve Harry has eh?! Expecting Sev to help him out and give him advice and acceptance with his relationship with Creevy, cheeky bastardo. I hope his impotence is nothing to do with his 'medical condition' and more to do with the soul bond. I also hope that suffers the way he has made Sevvy baby suffer...bastardo.

I just read this one from the beginning and it was hard reading at times because Harry is such a dick, but I was hoping that it would actually begin to make some sense why he is like that and that Harry and Sev could have some future. So I went on with hope.

But now I wish I hadn't cause the thing with Dennis and Neville, who I both hate here, is ruining the story and making no sense at all, and it's making it harder to get any idea of what Harry and Sev are thinking at all. All of it leaves me with asking why, about everybody and everything actually, without really caring to know the answer at the same time. (don't even get me started on the crazy "friends" who are just as bad!!!)

The almost-Sev/Neville and Harry/Sev's last talk was the last straw and this chapter is the last for me.

I have just decided after reading 36 chapters of this story that Harry Potter is a bastard. That's all I gotta say. Plus I think everyone else
should have left well enough alone. They forced Severus to do something he didn't want to do and now he's alone and seeing Harry with Dennis and he doesn't have feelings for Neville and poor Richard. He just stuck in the middle with his parents seperated..it sucks.

Sorry, I had some troubles with my computer
But what happenned? how could you seperated them?
I really like Dennis and I can't stand Neville, I really like hope you will perform some magic and bring back Sev and Harry together (maybe with Dennis, as a threesome!)
I really enjoy your story

Kiss Anhelo

Oh poor Severus, and what a mean Harry doesn't he know that his hurting Severus with the comments his making. I just want to go and smack him around that is what he deserves as for Neville I want to tell him to open his eyes and just help Severus with Harry to stop dragging his feet and see what it was there all along. Severus does not like you Neville, but oh well I know he wont stop, but maybe that is what Severus needs too. I am so happy that he got his independence back, but will Harry ever give him his magic back.

This was a incredible chapter I cannot wait to read the next one, even if I have to wait a whole month, take care and keep them coming.

oh wow... Is Harry really this dense???