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Haha, this chapter made my day!
Absolutely wonderful.
Poor Hermione, why do you have to torture her so?
And Sneaky Lucius, casting a glamor spell on his bits. ;]

Anxiously waiting for the next chapter, soon!

I rather liked 'green legs and...wham' as the title. While I did find the activities pleasant, I really wish these two would actually start talking to each other. It's a little frustrating to see such intelligent characters so blind when a few words, well meant, could smooth their lives ag reat deal. And when do we find out what he and Sev are up to?

To be quite honest, I am a bit dissepointed by "Lucius the superior pureblood" after this chapter. While understandably they will have a lot of adjustment to do before they make this marriage work, Lucius attitude of him being superior because Hermione is just a low mudblood is rather offputting. That he, due to being the perfect pureblood he is, he has the rigth to punish her until she admits that she is a stupid mudblood who should kiss his ass and thanks the Gods for being so lucky that he has lowered himself to marry her, sure ain't the kind of Hermione I like. She fougth him and his comarades (and came out the winner) from when she was just a child, I guess that smarts him quite a bit, just please, let her have some spine. If you make her wet and hot for him to have sex with her after what he just did, you will ruin about everything that is Hermione. The plot is great, and I do love the Hermione/Lucius/Severus pairings, and while well written bdsm is rather hot, what Lucius did here was over the limit for several reasons: He did so because he felt he had the rigth to punish her into being what he wants her to be, he finds it acceptable to beat her into submission, making this abuse rather than forplay. The Master in a bdsm relationship has a lot of responsibilites, non which Lucius showed here. Hermione should let him know without a doubt that any sex he wants after this will be against her will (not that I think this Lucius would care an iota), and when he is done she should make sure he knows that the only way he will get any sex will be by rape if he doesn't rethink his approach to their relationship.

The Feminist in me wants to smack Lucius up side the head for not realizing that Hermione is not comfortable in her new role, (but that is part of the fun). But the submissive in me, wants to be alone with Master Lucius :) My son screams when he wants something, I am trying to teach him patience. So far I'm losing my patience and he isn't gaining any.

I've read the other reviews for this chapter and frankly, I disagree with their wails of "poor Hermione". I think the reviewers are commiserating with "Hermione" the character that they know and love from the books/films and other fics. THIS Hermione, the Hermione portrayed in THIS fic, is a nasty piece of work. There is a real cruel, shrewish streak (which I guess is what you are going for, given the title of the fic) that runs a mile wide in her that makes me want to cover my eyes whenever I see her dialogue appear on screen. She's more of a villain than a heroine at this point in terms of what she says and the way she acts. Yes, you have given her a backstory, yes you have shown that her reactions are due to loneliness etc etc.

But it still doesn't make me like her. At all.

Honestly, I was hoping that her punishment would involve Lucius holding a pillow over her face until she expired. It says something about your skills as a writer that you have been able to portray such a strong, yet sympathetic Lucius--that's difficult to find. Lucius is usually portrayed as such a one-dimensional villain. Perhaps it is because your Lucius is so well rounded--flawed and yet his intentions toward his wife and his marriage are true--that I have no sympathy at all for this Hermione, who seems selfish and destructive.

Any chance Lucius will leave the bint for someone who appreciates him and his green trousers? At this point, anyone would be better than Hermione. Even Umbridge.

Oh dear. Yet another prime example of something that could have been avoided had they only communicated. Is it terrible of me to be wishing that by the end of the night Hermione tells Lucius the reasons behind her actions and her feelings and that Lucius ends up feeling a bit like an arse? It's only fair after all. Especially since Lucius has gotten his, for lack of a better phrase, pound of flesh. lol Fantastic update, I can't wait for more!!

I feel so sorry for Hermione right now. I just want her to be able to tell Lucius all the things going on in her head! I was siding with him at first because she was really picking at all his sore spots. But he's the one who manipulated her into this marriage and I think he should have a little more regard for what she's going through. I absolutely melted when he held her though. He has his moments, and when they happen, he's the sweetest husband ever!

Aw Sweetie, you will always be the Queen of Lumione to me and I can

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Chapter Ten: You wicked, wicked witch! Leaving us with a cliffie like that. Like Dickens and other serial writers, you drop off just before the climax