rate_review Reviews

Hi, I just discovered this story and I love what I read so far. I am only at chapter 6. I love the dynamics between hermione and Lucius. The verbal  exchanges are fantastic and so is the friendship bêtes Snape and Malfoy.

Dear Author, I'm here to deliver my detailed feedback on your story. PLOT 10/10 -it's original and no annoying loose ends. I've read quite a few LM/HG marriage scenarios, yours LLis fresh, well explained and it seems believable to me. SEX 10/10 -imaginative, well worded, varied and most importantly not too much of it. I like to see Lucius and Hermione in intimate situations, the age and background difference is exciting and amusing. I love Lucius' commanding nature. BDSM 8/10 -not descriptive enough for my liking. Also I don't think that corporal punishment in intimate relationship is issued in anger, it seems amateurish, which I believe Lucius is anything but. One needs to be in total control of emotions to deliver precise strikes in order to keep punishee from serious injury. CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT 9/10 -it's great to see Lucius has a (well hidden) soft side :-) and to witness Lucius/Draco relationship bloom. It's very heart warming experience. Hermione is almost as expected: strong-willed, opinionated, with brain and big mouth, BUT she demonstrates shocking lack of theoretical knowledge on sex matters, to the point of not knowing correct names of quite basic sexual practices?? Not believable for someone so knowledge thirsty... I loved how she worked Lucius' manierisms out so quickly, she was a little too cruel at times, but I think it's understandable in her circumstances. HUMOUR/DIALOGUES 10/10 -must admit I was laughing histericaly while reading your story. I loved Severus/Lucius baiting -so in character :-) very funny. Interactions between characters and clashes -all very amusing. NARRATIVE 8/10 -I personally had some problems understanding some of your sentences and was forced to re-read...few times :( It could be due to English being my second language..or your distinctive writing style..or lack of commas in places? It made it difficult for me to enjoy the story 100% as I wasn't sure what you meant at times. And to be clear, I didn't mind reading your story with a dictionary, which I did...:-)) OVERALL 9.1/10 -I loved it and Lucius and Hermione are good together, also loved the fact, that Severus is alive -I hate it when he's dead. A lot of fluff at the end, but I'm a big fluff fan (and sex, and love, and mistery) Thank you for sharing. Fox

Another thing, do you believe Draco would wear sandals??? I don't :-D :-D :-D Fox xx

I like your Lucius/Hermione so far, however she is a little under-informed about variety of sexual practices. Knowing Hermione's curious nature and hunger for knowledge, I'd assume she would at least read about it -even if she had no opportunity to try. I guess she's lucky it didn't work out with Ron. I must say it is such a thrill to read about her first experiences with Lucius. I find the idea of older and experienced/kinky man pared with near virgin girl very exciting and describing her as small, petite, tiny or pocket amazon ads to it considerably. So much in fact, that I'm very happy to overlook her lack of knowledge :-) I believe they are perfect match. Thank you for sharing. Fox

I know its been years since you wrote this story I just wanted to leave a comment. You are a brilliant writer. Your story has a great plot which is always interesting and the way you word things is sublime. I was always captivated by this story so thank you for writing it. As I said I know its been ages since you wrote this but I just wanted to let you know that your story was still being read and appreciated. I happen to be one of those "lurkers" that you mention. I never review a story but I just felt that your effort deserved to be recognised. So thank you very much for a highly enjoyable story.

I Loved this story so much that I couldn't sleep until I read it all *o*

You do BDSM a disservice. Their relationship is all bit rape and violence. She is abused from the get go and magically finds that a-ok and participates? That is 100% inaccurate and just what adult education societies disapprove of. How horrid for you to glorfiy emotional and physical abuse and call it bdsm.

One submits bc one wishes to and knowingly enters into a relationshi as such. Your lucius is not a dominant, he is an abusive person. That is not love. It is perceptions,like these that have real bdsm relationships labeled as freakish and abuse.

ohwow, what a glorious story! I started reading it once when it was still a WIP and only saved the link. Now I finally came back to the story and read the whole novel. Very juicy, lovely, intense, entertaining and all the way brilliant :D

I loved this story. So much that even though its been years since you finished it I had to review. It was beautifully written, a wonderful journey to take with Lucius and Hermione!

I love this story and read it over and over!