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May 15, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Take is slow........... Live life 1 day @ a time.... Let things go and breath...... That is from a 48 to a 21. I wish that my 21 would listen to the advise as well but he is a male.......... LOL
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December 29, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Wow. Loving the story. Surrounded by Grangers.........could Hermione possible be Draco's sister...or wait even better.....Hermione as a pureblood. This story is proving to be very interesting. The only thing better than this story would be Draco naked in a bed of pillow asleep. But hey, that's just my fantasy.
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June 2, 2009 at 12:00 AM
"he injected it into one of the main veins on her mound" - um, OUCH!!!!!!!
Congrats on cleaning this up in comparison to the first chappie (grammar, spelling, etc.) - still some errors but so much easier to read and enjoy.
Lucius and Narcissa are kind of dangerous together! Henry is so weird for Draco - LOL, I'm sure Hermione was looking at Narcissa like she was crazy.
What will happen later?
Congrats on cleaning this up in comparison to the first chappie (grammar, spelling, etc.) - still some errors but so much easier to read and enjoy.
Lucius and Narcissa are kind of dangerous together! Henry is so weird for Draco - LOL, I'm sure Hermione was looking at Narcissa like she was crazy.
What will happen later?
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June 2, 2009 at 12:00 AM
haha! love it.
can't wait to see what happens next.
and theres hardly anything, if anything at all, better than tom wearing only a slytherin tie. =D
can't wait to see what happens next.
and theres hardly anything, if anything at all, better than tom wearing only a slytherin tie. =D
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June 1, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Nice idea for a story, but maybe you should get a beta. It's especially the missing punctuation that makes the story difficult to read.
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June 1, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Interesting idea. It was hard to read: words missing, grammar, confusing tenses, spacing, etc. It can detract a reader from what would, otherwise, be a good fic. If you don't have, or can't get, a beta; just give it a good once over before posting (and then ensure you read and review it before hitting the add chapter button). Also, who was Henry? You mentioned him up top and then went straight to discussing Draco so I was a bit lost.
I like how you have a rehabilitated Lucius and Narcissa - just hilarious. I also love how they are plotting against Draco - so funny. And Draco being attracted to the very hot Hermione had me rolling. His calling her a mudblood yet wanting to throw her down on the nearest surface was quite amusing.
I like how you have a rehabilitated Lucius and Narcissa - just hilarious. I also love how they are plotting against Draco - so funny. And Draco being attracted to the very hot Hermione had me rolling. His calling her a mudblood yet wanting to throw her down on the nearest surface was quite amusing.
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June 1, 2009 at 12:00 AM
LOL I found the law number really funny cause I livein Detroit and our area code is 313
so it looked like a phone number to me. Great chapter
so it looked like a phone number to me. Great chapter