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schedule October 4, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Yeah I like the story so far, Please continue.
schedule June 1, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Very interesting! Can't wait for chapter 2!!! I love that movie!!!!
person Ashur
schedule May 31, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Interesting, a good start.

You should work on your grammar, it makes it kinda difficult to read.

Other then the grammar, it looks promising, keep it up.
person cukacute
schedule May 30, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Thxs I'll post that in now xD
schedule May 29, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Good so far, interesting plot though mind your grammer. Otherwise i hope to read more
person YanaYugi
schedule May 29, 2009 at 12:00 AM
cool story.. can i ask you to put when they are speaking on a new line. it got really confusing
person cukacute
schedule May 29, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Yes I will do it I'll revise it right now
schedule May 29, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Very interesting start i cant wait for you to continue. You know I had completely forgotten about the labyrinth it was one of my favorite movies, thanks for the trip back down memory lane :)