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I loved chapter 12. I liked the way you showed us the memory before Hermione and Draco saw it. That was very inventive and also good story telling. I also loved how Narcissa eventually got her way with Lucius. Girl Power!! Great Job! Looking forward to see what you've got up your sleeve.

Lisa

Chapter twelve was great! I thought you established the different relationships perfectly between Narcissa and Draco and Narcissa and Lucius. Loved it when she summoned his pruners and he chided her for it. Very nicely done.

I'm a bit confused...is Lucius with Severus, or with Narcissa, or both? :D

Hello kazfeist
I am not going to answer that just yet but please DO stick with me all will be explained.
Uliani

Bravo!!!!!!!!11

Becky, I just read chapters 8 & 9 and before I embarked on the next two, I just had to make one quick comment. You went ahead and made Lucius a Vegetarian! Ha Ha! I can't believe you found a way to fit that in there. Now on to the next two chapters so I can find out what fun you have planned for Hermione and her three gorgeous wizards! ;~)

It's me again. I loved the memories. Now I understand why Lucius is being so kind to Hermione; first because his mother died the same way and second, because his son is in love with her! OOOH, good stuff! I liked the long look Hermione gave Draco after they took their heads out of the pensieve. The howler was great too! This was my favorite part: "I WILL HAVE YOUR BALLS FOR EARRINGS!" I laughed so hard imagining Mrs. Weasley shouting those words! Also, I liked the way you made Severus kind to the house elf; I always imagined that he would be. And now I find out that my darling Sev is a wonderful cook. If only he would invite me over for dinner....

Looking forward to more, Lisa

I loved the howler, very funny! Uliani, I am very flattered that you would ask me to be your beta, but sadly, my own grammar and punctuation leave much to be desired. That's why I suggested you find one, since I have many of the same problems. You should go to the message board and leave a request for a beta that has at least a few stories of their own out there, so you know they have experience. HOWEVER: If they tell you to stop writing or to abandon a story completely, get another beta. Don't let them control your writing, they are there to help you make it better. I have an old english textbook from high school that I consult for help, also.

Hey keep them coming after that howler this is getting better. So, Draco loves her!.. Also you need a beta, if you want I can help you out my email is ishtar2012@aol.com, See you in the next.

I loved the memory scenes, they explain a great deal of the Malfoy's motivations: Lucius has sympathy and Draco has affection. This has a lot going for it.