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loved it cant wait till u update again !

Work on your grammar, and your characterization. Both are severely lacking.

Your dialogue is tolerable. Not quite believable, but at the same time, not utterly unbelievable. Tweak it a bit, and it will be just fine.

You need to flesh out your writing. These bare bones of mostly dialogue, with hardly any narration, is pitiable.

Your concept is nice, but the writing style doesn't do it justice. You sound like a child who is writing their first attempt at any form of fiction. I say that not to be mean, but to give my opinion of the writing style. It needs a great deal of work to make it better.

Death.

I really like how this story has played out and can't wait to see where you take it. Really short chapters so haven't gotten into the plot much.. hehe.. but thats ok from what I have read so far it has much promise. keep it up. Hope for an update soon... I'll be watching for one.

Author has changed?? First story was great then, after the AN, become horrible like it's writing 8 or 9 years old kid

Oh I so can't wait for them to find out! good Chapter

It was alright it just goes on about how harry feels personally i don't like that but whatever floats your boat. Very short aswell i would like to see more interaction between snape and harry
update soon

So now Harry goes back to Hogwarts a changed man. What will dumbledore say?

Good chapter very short. It was good to have a look from Dumbeldore's point of view and were he stands and his manipulations with Harry. Can't wait for more update soon xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

Good chappie!

Oh My that was an interesting chapter