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June 5, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I'm enjoying your story, i don't think its crap and you should keep going, that was just the beta's opinion, not everyone will like every story, but i'm enjoying it, i think you write quite well and there are hardly any typing or grammar errors that i've noticed. don't give up!
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June 5, 2009 at 12:00 AM
This is so good I love your story that beta is full of it thank you for sharing.
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June 4, 2009 at 12:00 AM
You know, I've read a lot of fic. A lot. And it's true that this isn't the world's greatest work of literature, which is probably a good thing, as anyone who wrote that would deserve to get paid for it. That doesn't mean you shouldn't keep working on it. For one thing, I really want to know what happens next, even if it's the clich
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June 4, 2009 at 12:00 AM
DON'T ABANDON YOUR OWN WORK!!! I don't know who your beta is, but it is not their job to tell you it's rubbish. A beta is supposed to help you improve your writing skills, such as grammar, tense and pacing, not act like a bloody theatre critic from the Times. They brit pick and help with details, thereby improving the story. Read the above reviews; we all like it. Don't leave us out in the cold, wondering what happened, please?
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May 30, 2009 at 12:00 AM
well written, heart-breaking and so tangible. my heart was breaking for Lucius loss and his fixation on Hermione.
she will, hopefully, be his salvation and lay down new bricks for a path leading to a new life.
she will, hopefully, be his salvation and lay down new bricks for a path leading to a new life.
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May 28, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I find Lucius contradictory....interesting. It feels as if the story will go beyond the battle leading us to a post-war era, which I always enjoy.
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May 28, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I am intrigued by this beginning! Interesting twist with the binding (and what was the hair sniffing and the cheek caressing?!?). Looking forward to updates soon.
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May 27, 2009 at 12:00 AM
okay i absoluately love the story!!!! i am really looking forward to reading more, lots more!! i just ask for a few things 1)DONT ABONDONG IT--first and formost if nothing else! 2)write as much as you can and 3)can you make it long and dont leave anything out! :) i think that you will do very well and that you are doing a great job of joining in on being a great lucius and hermione writer!!! please continue and soon!!!! i would love regular updates but i do know life gets in the way sometime so...anyways just keep writing and post asap! :)
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May 27, 2009 at 12:00 AM
You have a gift for succinct description and for personal motivations, I am looking forward to the rest of this! Keep going!
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May 27, 2009 at 12:00 AM
well THAT was unexpected....Lucius put himself in a whole lotta trouble.