rate_review Reviews

It's really good plz update soon

I love this story and can't wait to see where it will go considering it doesn't seem finished. It has a number of spelling mistakes, but those are somewhat easily ignored by the content of the story.

Really great story! I truly can't wait to read some more!!

I really really really can't wait to read more! One of the best Harry/Ron plots I have found!

you have got to update!!! simply amazing!!!

Now... while the plot - so far - is good, you have some problems, mainly with forgetting to type some words and misspelling, nothing serious mind but it gives the story that 'I'm only writing for reviews' which I'm almost certain that's not the way you're thinking. May I suggest you get a beta reader??

Overall: Great set-up. Execution's not too bad. Spelling and grammar need a LOT of work. The sex scene wasn't bad, it was almost rape, but stayed on the side of a rough seduction. I do find myself wondering what's going on with Hermione while all this is happening, but I'm sure you'll get to it eventually.

Great story so far! I have always been a fan of Harry/Ron stories, but have found some writers to be hit or miss. This seems like it is going to be a hit.
I like your writing style. I especially like the speach pattern you gave Hedwig. She is a bird, not a human, and would have a rather disjointed use of english language. So good job on that part!
I also liked the part where Harry was reading his book and petting the bat (Who I am assuming is Snape...am I right?). The image of this that played in my mind was really...well, sweet I guess. Don't know if that is what you were going for...
Once again, great first two chapters and I can't wait to read more!