rate_review Reviews

Great story. one of the best ss/gh I/ve read.

I really liked your story, so please don't take offense at what I am about to say. I think that you have a lot of potential as a writer, and you could benefit from working with a beta. You have a lot of easily remedied errors, and a beta could help you with those. If you're interested, you can search at www.thepetulantpoetess.com/beta.php or at perfectimagination.co.uk for a beta. There are some really good ones listed on both sites. But you know, for a first story, you did well and I commend you for your effort.

Oh that was great! Thanks so much for sharing it!

"Vixen, meet little Severus. He has been waiting a very long time to meet you." Best Line ever Great Story

Great chapter!

Yay, a lovely follow up.

So, how many people did they wake up? I'd love to see a morning after chapter :)

You know what...I liked it. =) I havent reviewed anything in a long time, havent had anything to say about much of what Ive read lately but this was a nice little bit to read before work on a rainy Monday morning. Your writing wasnt so bad, dont worry about an occasional small type-o, its fan fiction, its supposed to be fun!! Mind you I'd have a different opinion if it were a published work, I hate finding type-os in a book =) but thats what paid editors are for! You did a great job, Duckie!


Happy Writing!
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Wooohooo! You're writing more for this one! I'm so happy! I can't wait for more!!

Hi there.... First of all I want to say that I enjoyed this story and the unresolved sexual tension between them was quite evident! It really kept me reading. There is a "but" though (and I hope you take this in good faith. It's no critisism, you only have to read some of my own unbeta'd stories to know that I was once in your shoes!) You really need a beta to help you with your punctuation, grammar and sentence construction. Even when you re-read your own work, there may still be errors that you have missed... we all do it. That's why beta's exsist! If you need one, try The Petulant Poetess and look in the forum, or maybe advertise here for one? I'm sure someone will help. I hope you do, because the content of your story was very, very good... and hot! Oh man... I wanted to be Hermione, face to face with Severus... *fans self*....