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for Their Phoenix

by Lomonaaeren

person acr
schedule May 11, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I like this fic. I think that Draco, Snape and Harry were very in character. I like the level of denial you have going on here so far. Also, I always like it when author's don't have people faint at critical moments.

A tiny criticism: I thought the justification for Harry's phoenix power was a little too easy and convenient. I got the impression that you weren't very interested in that part of the story, that you wanted to get to the 'meat' of the story, which is the interaction between Snape, Draco and Harry, which I can understand.

I thought maybe that Harry's wand could have splintered, driving shards of wood and tiny fragments of phoenix feather into him. Also, maybe that he got the phoenix tears in the Chamber? Just a thought.


Great fic, can't wait for more.
person safa
schedule May 11, 2009 at 12:00 AM
nicely done..will plzzz continue this story..i want to know wat hapns in the end..plz plz plz
person christis
schedule May 11, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Wow! I'm hooked. I'm a big fan. I've read most of your other stories and can't wait to see how this one progresses. Looking forward to chapter 2
person evanone
schedule May 11, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Good start. I liked your other stories and I think I wont be dissapointed with this one. I will wait for your update
person caldonya
schedule May 11, 2009 at 12:00 AM
This looks to be so much fun! I can't wait to see more of it. I like the scene in the shack very much.
person qwerty
schedule May 10, 2009 at 12:00 AM
That was some first chapter. I really like the start of this story. Intriguing title as well.
Great job so far. Keep going!!
person Juana13
schedule May 10, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Oh that was brilliant! : )
you really got me interested now. that was a very thrilling beginning to what seems will be a very good story.
i look forward to the next chapter,
which i hope will be updated soon. : )
looking forward to it already!!
can't wait!
schedule May 10, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Epic! So glad to read another story of yours. Please update again, soon! :P