rate_review Reviews

i love how you're characterizing snape as inexperienced with kissing and uncomfortable showing affection in public! Draco is also adorable! i just hope that when the three get together, Draco stays the one who needs protecting and Harry doesnt automatically become the bottom for both of them (that happens too often in fics of this kind).
can't wait for an update!

you start alot of sentences with 'but' or 'and' which 1) is repetitive and 2) is grammatically incorrect. you also make far too many paragraphs. when Harry is thinking, it shouldn't be italicized, it should be put withing single quotation marks 'like this'.
anyway, appart from that it was an awesome continuation and i really want to know what happens next!!! (yes i intend to review after i read each chapter, call me obsessive)

Well, it's progress. It's going to take a lot more work on Sev's part than on Draco's, but if I know Snape, it's gonna sneak up on Harry before he's even realized what's happened. P.S. Everyone check out my profile for a fun challenge.

i love the way you write! you describe things in such minute detail! at some times theres too much information though and i can't really understand what you're describing, or how something is suposed to look. like when Harry killed Voldemort. i couldn't picture the scene in my mind at all because you mix descriptions of feelings with physical descriptions. i can't tell if its in his mind, what he's thinking or if it's really happening outside of him.
i also don't get the fires Harry sees. do Malfoy and Snape look like fire to him? are the flames on the side of his vision? (like how you can see the rims of your glasses in the corner of your eye) or are the flames something he senses and he can just tell that they are coloured?
anyway, i also love the characterisation!

This story gets better and better. I'm really liked the internal thought process Harry had. You're giving great depth to your characters. The moment between Snape and Harry was perfect in its subtlety. I also thought where Ginny asks would he still go even if she did say no was sad.

I understood why they were behaving the way they were but I didn't stop be from being annoyed with them. I'm glad to see the evolving viewpoints. I think when someone is writing a story using these three characters, power is an important aspect. All three want it just in different degrees. I had already figured out why he let Snape into his rooms but I liked how Snape worked it out. Great work. Update soon!

LOVED THIS CHAPTER!!!!!!!!! About time they all started acting as adults, which means, about time they tried to understand each other; I

I like that Severus is willing to acknowledge his shortcomings, especially where Harry is concerned. Still and all, as it stands right now, only Draco has any chance with Harry, and even then it's a slim chance.

chapter 3: absolutely awesome. I loved the sly, sneaky, manipulative, all-too-slytherin Snape here, and him playing Draco... they are both so ... I don't know, enchanting in their flawed perfection.

ch 4, mmmm, very interesting development with Draco and Harry. Snape is so lonely - even if he is very self-contained.... gah,, Harry! get on with it! slash sex!