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man .. how will sev get his mission done and keep mione safe at the same time .... please please update soon later for now

angel

Interesting..... Different... Keep going!

Suggestion:
You need to structure your conversations so that they read easier. Meaning Harry's words, reactions, etc should not be mixed in the same structure as someone elses. It will make your story easier to read.

Another suggestion is to NEVER take for granted that it's easy for the reader to know what you find is obvious. I've done that myself when writing, then I come back later to work on the story and even I have a hard time. Make everything crystal clear.

Keep going! I'm anxious to see how this is going to play out.

Great, wonderful and very nice!! well severus has got his work cut out for him. i loved how you have draco and hermione together in the end of the chapter there!!!!!! :) loved poor ginny and her reaction! hehehe. :) well i do hope that you will be updating! and soon! :)

CHAP 1!
yay! draco saved hermione!^^ GREAT CHAPTER I LOVE IT!

wow that was awsome start .. please please update soon i would love to read more ... later for now

angle

i really liked the first chapter! i just may ask one thing of you though and that i some structure--please. the one long paragraph is really hard to read. thanks other than that i look very forward to what you have in store for this story!! :) i am courious though is hermiones character going to be more like you have start out or is it going to be similar to cannon, promise just wondering cause sometimes people do great things when they change them i just want to know what to expect. i am very looking forward to the next chapter! i love long stories! :)

That was great!! i love the story so far! also a big thanks for the structure (it helped tons!) just a few small grammer errors but no worries they are easy to miss! i love where this is going! also you did a great job of not getting me lost cause you wrote every step rather then just see something in you head and missing steps (boy i hope that made sense!) it makes reading so much easier and enjoyable! i do hope that you will be posting regularly cause i love this story its fun! :)

way to short and i only say that because i liked it :> i laughed at the end because i could acually see Draco doing that! will you continue?

Nice, but way to short.