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by Catium

schedule November 11, 2010 at 12:00 AM
This is really good. I joped that Harry would finally be with Draco, but it was still good. I am lgad I read it.
xoxo,
kitkat
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schedule May 1, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I really liked it! It was sad, but at least you understand where Harry is coming from... So I suppose it's a little better. :( Poor Draco though.

I would personally suggest you use more contractions in your writing (you're, I'm, they've) because writing "I am" in dialogue all the time sounds pretty formal. On the one hand, it's Draco so he's been raised to be an aristocrat, but he's also talking to his lover, so I think he should be a little more informal. Just a thought for future reference.

Anyway, once again, loved it! Very cute but pout-inducing :D
schedule April 23, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Wow! Draco is willing to wait!