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February 7, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Keep going! This has enormous potential! I love it already! Your personality for both Harry and Draco are spot on! The way you write is also very sophisticated! Please keep writing!
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March 1, 2011 at 12:00 AM
r u ever going to continue this...still waiting..love the story
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November 22, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Hello,
I'm sorry, but your story und especially it's characters are so clishe it's not even funny anymore. The Potters neglecting "poor little Harry" so much is unrealistic to the point where it gets ridiculous. Why would Sirius and Remus not know what's been done to Harry and Rose when it is so fucking obvious? Evan and Rose are nothing more than scenery; they have no unique features and act according to their clishe roles 24/7, which makes them predictable, boring and inhuman.
Another problem of your story is that you are rushing through the plot instead of taking your time and writing the scenes out. It's better than the story I reviewed last, but your text is still more of a storyline than a real narration. The first chapter was a good start, try to rewrite the rest of the story into something equally detailed.
Fruehling
I'm sorry, but your story und especially it's characters are so clishe it's not even funny anymore. The Potters neglecting "poor little Harry" so much is unrealistic to the point where it gets ridiculous. Why would Sirius and Remus not know what's been done to Harry and Rose when it is so fucking obvious? Evan and Rose are nothing more than scenery; they have no unique features and act according to their clishe roles 24/7, which makes them predictable, boring and inhuman.
Another problem of your story is that you are rushing through the plot instead of taking your time and writing the scenes out. It's better than the story I reviewed last, but your text is still more of a storyline than a real narration. The first chapter was a good start, try to rewrite the rest of the story into something equally detailed.
Fruehling
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November 2, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I like this story a lot. I especially like your other stories Abandoned Child and A Mate to Two Werewolves. please please update at least one of your stories. I love all of them. You are a great writer
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August 30, 2010 at 12:00 AM
hello,
the is interested. I hope it comes a new chapter.
PS: i like all of your story and my question is, are there by owned husband, child of azkaban a new chapter?
LG
the is interested. I hope it comes a new chapter.
PS: i like all of your story and my question is, are there by owned husband, child of azkaban a new chapter?
LG
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August 9, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Sooo glad to see you updated. I love your stories and this one is probably my favorite.
Poor Harry, I hope things get better for him and Draco.
Poor Harry, I hope things get better for him and Draco.
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August 3, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Poor Harry!!! Soooo need chapter 7!!!
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July 20, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Yay, loved! Hope you post more soon!
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July 18, 2010 at 12:00 AM
...how will Rose react with this news? And would Draco allow Rose to visit Harry?
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July 18, 2010 at 12:00 AM
What a cool idea. Looks like the Potters are sorry parents and hopefully Draco will let Rose around. So now I wonder if your story will go with Harry in a life of servitude or if he will be able to experience the life he never had.