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I hope they get him and the pup to come together with the rest of the pack.

yay! you wrote more on the story. i really love this story. it is really sad what the pack did to harry. i hope he gives them hell for what they did to him. yet i hope he starts trusting fenor and draco. i can not what for the next chapter . please write more real soon.

can't wait to read more of this story!!!!!!!

good chapter, please update soon

Hi! i LOVE your story! LOVE it! I just have some suggestions that may help improve it overall (I am not bashing your story!). I think you should add more dialogue, more filler, so to speak. For the first five chapters, i was lost as to the background that led Harry to his current position. You already have an AMAZING plot, you just need more filler! Ok again, I love your story! Please update soon!

Bloody brilliant!!! Loved it!!! I can't wait for chapter 10 to be updated, please update soon^_^

Jan

PS: If it's not to much trouble can you email me a notice when you next update?
naiomi2nailyn@yahoo.com

This is getting really really interesting. Im lookinh forward to reading more! hopefully soon!

Nire

PLEASE UPDATE SOON. I LIKE TO SEE WHAT HAPPEN NEXT.

This is an interesting story, and I'm happy to continue reading, but you have serious issues that need to be considered.

These generally follow:
Use as little ****** as possible. It overrides the story visually and really shouldn't even be necessary.
Never have an author's note or POV in your story. Part of developing as a writer is being able to insert the information you're giving without having to have that. Relying on notes and POV statements will cripple your writing.

Those are the really big things. Like I said, I really am interested in reading this, but your technique needs a little attention.

Looks really good!