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This is a good story please continue.

Poor Harry just keeps getting more and more piled on.

Soooo need chapter 7!!! What does Ron's letter say? What do the three High Lords plan?

wow i really like this story, please update soon! *kisses*

Great story!!! I love it! I can't wait till you update again! I hope it's soon!

wow....
i wonder...
who's the Dom n Sub for Harry??

Hm I just read the first chapter and it seems really interesting so far so I definitely plan to continue. I like how you actually give him some credit in recognizing Petunia as family, and a witty sense of humor lol. However, there are a few grammatical/other problems. In the first chapter you use the word "affective" when I'm sure you meant "effective". I've never heard of anyone making that mistake before, but for future reference it is "effective" and "affected", simply because the derivative words "effect" and "affect" are a noun and a verb respectively. For instance it would be okay to say "it had an effect on me," but one would never say "it had an affect on me,

Ok so I've thought it out and actually "affective" could be used in that sense, however it's highly unusual...well anyways sorry for jumping you and for thinking out loud on your review page lol, I'm about half way through the second chapter and I absolutely L-O-V-E it!!! It is much much better than the first chapter and leads me to believe that any minor mix-ups came from the rigors of getting started lol. Well I'm off to finish and then review! It would be so much easier if I wasn't interrupted by that stupid server maintenance thingy that makes you play ping-pong for twenty-five when it says it'll only take fifteen lol.

I LOL'd at how their cute little happy vibe was disrupted. Ok I loved so many things about this chapter so I'm just going to list them all. I loved the contrast of light/dark when Harry was regaining consciousness, and your descriptions and attention to detail are simply marvelous! When you were describing his new appearance and well...everything really, it just seemed so real. I also love how you are able to achieve a sense of realism that is completely beyond the grasp of many (read: most) authors. It's not just *BOOM* Hey guess what you're an elf, *BOOM* You now rule us all with ease and absolutely no transition, subtext or character development whatsoever *BOOM* Mate *BOOM* Incredible powers that literally come out of nowhere *BOOM* Hey I just defeated Voldemort, Hoorah! In the beginning Soren's speaking pattern was a little repetitive, but other than that he seems like a pretty cool character. There are still a few errors, but I'm sure they're just minor editorial issues, like when you say (or rather Harry says): "I mean, I only just been through this change." would probably be better as "I mean, I only just went through this change" or something like that. Or where you say "Each of the three High Lords resides

I loved this chapter too! I still spotted a few mistakes and I'm really REALLY sorry that I keep pointing this out, because I know you know. Well ok I suppose I don't KNOW that you know, but it's a pretty solid assumption. The thing is I'm just way too anal retentive to be leaving a review and NOT say anything. However, I will try to work on that for both our sakes. Yours in that you won't have to listen to me go on and on about them, and mine in that I won't have my head cut off by an annoyed writer. So on a different note, I love how you included details about their society, and Lothair's motivations, and their history, why their branch is where it is and all those other little details. I simply love when authors are able to create a whole new world for their characters while still retaining who they are, which is why we love them in the first place. Oh, and the cross dressing part...lol. I just looked at the clock and it is 2:30am here lol, no wonder I'm rambling! Well I'll probably just read one more chapter and then hit the sack.