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August 16, 2009 at 12:00 AM
This story is amazing. You've really gotten into Draco's head for this. To be able to put words to his misery, the way you have, leaves me speechless. I love the way that you're writing this in present tense. It's something different and I'm enjoying it as if I'm right there with them.
One small thing tho. You've been using the word 'then' and not 'than'. For example: "I'm better. Then you are." This would show that the speaker is making a list. Then is usually substituted for 'and'. "I'm better than you are," would mean that the speaker is making a comparison. It's a common mistake and I often catch myself making it. Other than that, your story is coming along beautifully.
Please update soon.
One small thing tho. You've been using the word 'then' and not 'than'. For example: "I'm better. Then you are." This would show that the speaker is making a list. Then is usually substituted for 'and'. "I'm better than you are," would mean that the speaker is making a comparison. It's a common mistake and I often catch myself making it. Other than that, your story is coming along beautifully.
Please update soon.
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August 10, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I like the way you describe things. There is an almost elemental flow. I'm not normally a fan of the whole cutting thing, but I do like your story. :) Keep updating!
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August 4, 2009 at 12:00 AM
LOVE this!!! Please don't stop now!! I want to know what happens next!
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July 25, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Bad reader! Bad!!! I am so sorry. I just realized I hadn't reviewed and I sincerely apologize. I have waited with anticipation for each chapter and I now wait for more soon. His pain is so sad and his confusion palpable. His conversation with Blaise just heightened the depression factor. I do hope he somehow quickly learns to cope with his confusion, fear and pain without cutting himself. And, I hope he comes to realize what a true friend Blaise seems like he could be. I look forward to more REALLY soon, okay? Thanks! HG4eva
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July 21, 2009 at 12:00 AM
whooaa omg this fic is amaazing :D!! i want more :)!
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July 20, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Well I am glad you updated, but I am hoping you'll not have Draco solve all his problems with a blade. Or Blaise. God, that was bad, even for me. Keep updating!
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July 12, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I must say I love your story. I didn't see any grammar mistakes, so good job. I can't wait to see what happens next.I like how both Hermoine and Draco aren't drastically out of character. I would also love you forever if you updated soon because I hate cliffies.
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July 11, 2009 at 12:00 AM
They are 17 and boys the only thing they talk is sex anb bubs, notning else... Not surprising... but hey keep them coming. And please make this one the last cut or at least save him from the Mark or make him go to the Headmaster or his godfather.. Anything but same my beautiful and sexy Draco please.... LOL
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July 10, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Great two chapters!! I really enjoyed the ending here
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July 10, 2009 at 12:00 AM
oh my what is up with Blaise? perhaps he should have eased Draco's fears which could be seen a mile away...and what will Hermione find in that bathroom?