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want more

this is amazing i love cant wait to read more

-reviews- Cookiez please! ;D

Other then the cookie, I LOVE this story, I cried in chapter nine, omg! Damn Draco! I would mind seeing a extrememly jealous Draco until he gets back with Hermione ;D That'll teach the lil'bastard LOL!

I don't know if you do this but do you send updates to people when you update your story? Or do you have a website or something for that?

If you don't, that's fine! I'll just check back every 1-2 weeks. :]

Thanks!

-reviews- Cookiez please! ;D

Other then the cookie, I LOVE this story, I cried in chapter nine, omg! Damn Draco! I would mind seeing a extrememly jealous Draco until he gets back with Hermione ;D That'll teach the lil'bastard LOL!

I don't know if you do this but do you send updates to people when you update your story? Or do you have a website or something for that?

If you don't, that's fine! I'll just check back every 1-2 weeks. :]

Thanks!

ohh my goddd, this is amazing
i've been dying for you to put this chapter up!
i feel sorry for both of them here, though :(! x

I really liked this chapter! It had a very sad tone but I get why Draco's doing this.
Thanks for posting.
G&ST

Hey,
Nice to see a new chapter up, I was wondering what happened to this story o0
Umm... I feel a tad... weird but I believe some critiquing is due.
I found you did this several times...(e.g. below, I caps it for you)

'Finding it simply impossible not to take action against such absurd behavior, on Friday evening, Hermione HAS made her decision; she is going to get answers out of him if it is the last thing she does. '
It appears to me... there are issues on the tense and the narrative.
Personally, I think it would have read easier like...
'Finding it simply impossible not to take action against such absurd behavior, on Friday evening, Hermione HAD made her decision; she is going to get answers out of him if it is the last thing she does.'

I know, minor details but... it happens regularly in your sentences... I noticed this in your previous chapter when rereading (I must have just auto 'corrected' in my head when first reading)
Like the next paragraph...

'Sometime in that same hour, following a sort of impromptu plan, Hermione Granger FINDS herself hidden behind a rather ridiculously large stack of books in the Hogwarts Library.'
Wouldn't it be more fluid changing 'finds' to 'found' ??? So that it read as, '...following a sort of impromptu plan, Hermione Granger found herself hidden...'

These are just suggestions... I've just noticed it upon reading and breaks the flow of the story focusing on minor details like that.
Otherwise I'm loving this plot line and the self-harm issue... it's not a normal FF plot line... I think anyway.

My heart is as broken as Hermione's....wonder what you have in store for us to make him see the light.

Poor Draco! Why is it that in almost every story, his preferred method of dealing with his future is to push Hermione away? And she's usually so observant, why can't she figure it out? Anyway, looking forward to seeing how you get them back together. :D

This was intense, very, his depression is very deep and cutting do not help but hey is part of the fic and the story line.. Couls we hope for a happy ending at least? And more smut? LOL