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for Breaking the Chain

by RynStar15

schedule April 18, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I was sobbing through the goodbyes. I'm usually not at all affected. I mean I laugh or smile or sigh, but crying through a story I'm readin has only ever really happened once, and that was because I had emotional female issues at that time!! haha

But this...I was sobbing. I had to stop and blow my nose and clear my eyes and start all over again just to end up in tears once more seconds later.A true mark of a remarkable author is to pull forth such emotions from their readers.

I am so blown away by this chapter. I mean this was a good story before, and now to me you've made this a great story. Truly truly incredible.

Thank you for sharing your talents.

Until next chapter.
xo
dM
schedule April 18, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Girl you make me tear eye and everything and you left me hanging here... OUTCH that was mean..... but hey it would be all better if you update soon..... :)
person javolk
schedule April 18, 2009 at 12:00 AM
OMG! OMG! OMG! You are very evil for ending the chapter there!!! Now I won't be able to concentrate on finishing my final presentation this weekend because I will be thinking about this story!!! *And it's due Monday at 8AM* That means that you NEED to update tomorrow to put my mind somewhat at ease!!! PLEASE!!!!!!!! I will be forever in your debt!!!
person Fallen Star
schedule April 18, 2009 at 12:00 AM
You evil evil little witch!!! I'm throwing down the rotten tomatos and going for the BB gun!!!!! GIVE ME MORE NOW!!!!!!
schedule April 18, 2009 at 12:00 AM
aww now i'm all sad...don't worry i'm not going to throw veggies at you anyway
person Citten
schedule April 18, 2009 at 12:00 AM
.....weekend? weekend!?! WEEKEND!!!!!!!!!!!!!! YOU HAVE GOT TO BE JOKING!!!!!!! that is beyond mean! well you have lot--and i do mean lots--to cover in the next chapter! first i do love the chapter! :) i love the part with hermione had with her friends and i really love what they talked about and the emotions that you protraited. i love that you showed what was happening to them on the night before. but i still dont like that you have left us hanging! well two questions (which you better answer in the next chapter) are..... one: doesnt she know any spell or charm that would let them know 'if' she was pregant? and two: i really do hope that (even though he HAD to give her the potion) they talk about thier feelings, right? do post SOON!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :)
person apolla92
schedule April 18, 2009 at 12:00 AM
that was awesome! you have me at the edge of my sit i want more! update soon!
person Anon
schedule April 18, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Oh that was heart wrenching. (reaches for ANOTHER tissue and blows her nose) Their goodbyes or 'don't you dare say good bye' in Ron's case were just wonderfully emotional. And then out of nowhere Draco shows up to be the icing on the cake.

Now what makes him so sure they're pregnant just they had unprotected sex???? There's only a certain time for her to be at her fertile peak (unless he knew that too) And purebloods aren't exactly known for their reproduction rates (except, of course, for the Weasleys) LMAO. Hmm I wonder what's going on there?????
person Citten
schedule April 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
LOVED THE CHAPTER!!!!! i am so looking forward to their night together! :) good old severus! well something wonderful has to happen to have things work out in the end! i just wish that (like draco) she did not have to forget what happens and i really would love to know who she left letters for! :) i hope all is well in life and you will be able to post a new chapter and soon!!!!!!!!!!!!!1 :)
person apolla92
schedule April 16, 2009 at 12:00 AM
OMG! that was awesome, i can't wait for the next chapter!