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April 1, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Hi, I just read your story and thought it was great. The amusing title caught my eye and brought me to read it and I liked how Ginny seemed completely at ease with the situation as Hermione tried to work out how to react to her advances. Coming on that strong is a bit of a risk but it paid off well for them both.
As for minor mistakes, the only one that stood out for me was this:
"Unless of course your bum is using your wand behind your back. Literary."
That probably wants to say 'Literally' at the end instead of 'Literary'. I'm from England I reckon you probably write better english than a lot of people I know here.
It was a fun little plot with well described scenes and a very nice ending with the accidentally brushed hands. I'd love to see you write some more Hermione/Ginny stuff in the future :)
-Reborn
As for minor mistakes, the only one that stood out for me was this:
"Unless of course your bum is using your wand behind your back. Literary."
That probably wants to say 'Literally' at the end instead of 'Literary'. I'm from England I reckon you probably write better english than a lot of people I know here.
It was a fun little plot with well described scenes and a very nice ending with the accidentally brushed hands. I'd love to see you write some more Hermione/Ginny stuff in the future :)
-Reborn