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Well, lot of stuff happened in this chapter. Hmm, I'm wondering what kind of game Draco is playing with Marshall. Is it really just about having someone so attentive take care of him because he needs the comfort, or is there something devious afoot? It's hard to tell with the ferret.

Egads, I am aghast at how bloodthirsty the Order has become, particularly Minerva! I guess a quick and easy kill is not enough, but sending them off to the Acromantula to be poisoned, mummified, and then eaten is horrifying! And I don't know how to feel about McGonagall's acceptance; she's all, "Andromeda, let's get these bitches off our hands, yo, and then hit the Rocky Road, hellz yeah!". Yikes.

Nott is a worrisome figure, but I wonder how Bella will really take to him? Perhaps she will not be so fond of Theodore if he targets one of her favorites.

And Harry has become quite the sage in his harem duties. I love his advice to Ron to see their sexual demands as a game. Good thinking and a great way to get Ron to focus. I was surprised by how eager he was to get his friend right into the mansex so he could drive Bella wild. Like that he's gotten so observant as well as resilient. It seems Bella enjoyed herself for the most part, but I'm wondering why she always sends them away right after. Will she be keeping Harry longer and longer the closer she gets to him? It's an interesting progression in her expectations of him.

Lastly, I worry that poor Harry will need some rest soon. Especially since he has to have an enema every time he goes to see her and those can get a little overdone. Not that I don't love Harry with Bella all the time, but will this cause some strife in the harem when so many boys haven't even been summoned? I'm curious to see their reaction when they find out Harry is going again. I liked how we got the thoughts from both boys at the end of their evening to compare where their feelings are at right now. Ron, so typically worrying about his orientation and what it means that he enjoyed what Harry did to him, while Harry just takes all of his sexuality in stride and doesn't worry too much about, his mind more concerned about his fate with Bella. I would be questioning why she wants him so often, too, and he is right to wonder what she wants with him, but I also like that he's put in the role of Chosen One, once again, even in something like harem slave.

Looking forward to the next chapter!

Oh, nice, nice. That was an almost sweet little interlude between Harry and Bella; I feel for him in his confusion, but I like how he's trying to consider this other side of her.

Lucius' fondness for Harry just tickles me. And the boys' lessons in humiliation/torture was interesting. I'm surprised Fred got saddled with Ron again in front of their father.

I liked the bath scene and how tender Bella was with Harry. Her pouting was so unexpected, wanting to hear the boy profess some sort of devotion to her. I really liked Harry's musings on this new development when he was talking to Arthur. The last lines of the chapter were hilarious. Merlin's flaming penis! Harry in love with a crazy woman? What an ending that would be!

Great chapter! Looking forward to Ron's second chance with his bezzy mate on hand.

Interesting chapters very good work. You know at these moments of weekness I can't help but think boy Harry could probably worm his way out of the harem and become her right hand man. Do you still plan on killing off Bella at the end of the story? Your in a great position to just have Harry talk Bella into leaving with him. Oh well until the next chapter.
Pete

Hey, Mamacita, you had a missing bracket in your HTML markup so half of your chapter is in italics. Also, somewhere in the sex scene you had 'load' groan, instead of 'loud'.

Other than that, well, where do I start? This was a long one, and it was interesting to see just how poor a Queen Bella really is. She has no idea how to run a government, does she? I find Lucius' predicament amusing.

I love Fred. He's a dream. His pragmatism goes hand in hand with his humor and it was great to see Bella respond so strongly to his sexy side. However, I have to say, she must be nuuuuuuuts, if she put herself in the position to be manacled by her own slaves with her wand laying about helplessly. The woman is not terribly smart. But then, I despair that Fred was a little off his game, too. Oh well. I just have to say, though, in Ron's defense---I really don't see him as that much of a dullard, just possibly innocent in some ways. Growing up with his older brothers, I can't imagine he's *too* innocent, and he's proved to have quite a ribald sense of humour himself.

Also, I think it's hilarious that you and I are on the same wavelength when it comes to Weasley sizemeat. I totally pictured Ron being hung, and it's kind of sexy that he is unaware of his gift as of yet. I think it only fair that the Weasley men were given some reason to have the women fall all over them if it wasn't going to be financial success (although the twins excelled in that area, too). The fact that Bella considers Molly and Arthur 'prudes' when the couple have had seven children shows just how daft she can be, however.

Fun chapter, but I am all about Harry getting his "alone" time with the mad Queen. Yay!! Can hardly wait to see what happens!

Where is a class of cold water? Wow, dearest that was hot. ::Fans self:: I'm glad that I've finally caught up. I curious to see what will finally send Marshall over the edge. I can't help but be a silly fan girl and wonder if Draco and Harry will end up together in the end. I have to say that it's nice to read a story where Lucius isn't a sadistic bastard. Although, I do like him cast as a villian sometimes, just not every time. I'm almost finished with my chapter and hopefully will send it to you tonight. Sorry had to delte previous review when I noticed a typo. I was sure you'd understand ;).

Wow...with the fisting. Holy crap, wasn't expecting that. Harry is such a slut, he can handle anything.

I loved Lucius' languid caress upon Harry's backside. He's a little drawn to the teenager, isn't he? I think the whole Malfoy clan has a serious thing for him, to be honest.

Bella's instructions and bidding to not bore her were so fantastically in character. I love her voice here. And the reveal of how Voldemort used her in such a chilling way was so dramatic. Now we're seeing a bit of the reasons behind the madness. I almost want her to open up to Harry completely--it looks like he's one of the few people to get that kind of confession out of her.

The spanking was hot. Loved the way he handled the abuse like a trouper and I'm glad Bella didn't go to nutso with the Cruciatus on Draco. You're making me almost feel sorry for the ferret...I don't know what to do about that, lol. That's got to be tough enduring the suggestion of his crazy aunt with his father. Still, I'm hopeful that Bella takes Harry with another slave again. Would love to see his reaction being sandwiched between her and a hard prick, especially sitting in someone's lap with Bella on top of him---rowwrr! You know he would absolutely love it. But I fear he may be banished from Bella's bedroom for a while after he displeased her as part of his punishment. Poor boy, this is the second time he's been summoned and he STILL hasn't received a proper introduction to intercourse. Maybe the third time will be the charm. How do you come down from being fisted to regular old anal or hetero sex? He's going to need it to be really intense from now on, I suspect.

Great job!

Wow that was interesting. I was hopeing that Bella would spend some time with both of them not just a spanking with Harry and a quiky with Draco. It was really funney the dialog between the two of them. If they wern't so scared of her they would probably be laughing the heads off.
Do you think you could add a threesome scene with Bella in the middle of Harry and Draco?
Well good job as always.
Pete

Okay, mamacita, I gave it a shot.

It wasn't the mutual sucking off I minded so much, but...well, you just made it sooo easy. I obviously missed something at the beginning. When exactly did Harry and Draco stop hating each other and grow up? Was it during the war or the battle right up to their imprisonment by crazy Bella for the harem; the one where they were on opposite sides? I guess I'm confused by that. They were mortal enemies and then Draco got thrown into the harem all pissy and Harry felt sorry for him and presto---they're sticking up for each other in more ways than one. And I love that Harry is just such a nice guy that he can't help but give his old buddy there a reciprocal blowjob even though he's not gay, because, well, gosh, that just wouldn't be right. I suppose I was assuming that the opening battle was more or less from canon, but since you are not referring to Harry saving Draco from the fire, I'm not sure now.

But that was my only gripe. And oh yeah, why is the gay guy getting marginalized? Just because he likes blokes doesn't mean he's got it hot for boys, that just makes him sound creepy.

My question, however, is about The Rules. While the punishment is severe for any infractions between eunuch and slave, what about the boys messing about with each other? Are they being watched somehow that we are not yet aware of? Or is it a don't ask don't tell kind of thing?

Well, Bella in the mix should be interesting. She should love Harry when the boy is so innate with his oral skills, regardless of which genitals are in question. The boy is a keeper.

Whoa! Poor Stuart! See, now that was the kind of session I was expecting her to have with Harry. I guess she must really like the Boy-Who-Lived more than she cares to admit since she was practically romantic with him.

I thought your rendering of Stuart's suffering under the Cruciatus was excellent. Great, great imagery; you could really feel his exquisite pain. And now he's getting dumped? Talk about adding insult to injury. But I think this was good in that after Harry's night with her, the boys had been expecting something very pleasurable, and now they have no idea what will happen with each of them anymore. Plus, the idea of what manner of consequences could be doled out are much more real now.

Yes, I am absolutely a Ferret-ist! And proud of it, lol. I just hate the cunt. And I love Harry so I hate to see them together. I've read enough fics just for the sex, and a threesome with Bella sounds hot (although Harry and Ron would have been smoking--something to consider?), but I just hope Harry doesn't suddenly start getting mushy feelings over the boy. *shivers and makes Buffy face* Nnnnngggghhhh! I never even thought he was good looking as described in canon, so this fanon idea of him as some beautiful, androgynous sex god just goes right over my head. Whatever floats people boats, I guess. It's just always a bit disappointing when the Malfoy punk manages to insinuate himself into every fanfic with the intention of stirring Harry up. I just don't buy Harry ever being turned on by him; in the case of their continued enmity I think it's hardly UST, just a cigar being a cigar.

But enough of that. I liked that we got Snape's pov in this chapter and I think it's funny that Bella's not much of a leader. She's a bit too mercurial and preoccupied with her evenings to worry about small matters like state affairs and armies. I think Lucius' resistance will have no problems taking her down when they're ready. I like Dobby's independence in this, too, and that Lucius is thinking of recruiting him as his own man and not a slave.

Good chapter and am looking forward to next week. Don't worry about warning me, I can always skim over what doesn't fancy me, but I'm really curious to see where you take Bella and Harry in the way they regard each other. I think that's whats really attracting me in your plot set-up; there is so much material to work with here and the power plays between them are fascinating. He can be a real match for her.

Oh yea. Not really into torture but it was definatly interesting. Are you gonna torture Harry too? And I can't imagine you making Dobby evil. I'm sure you'll have Dobby help the resistance. My only other questions are; Is Dobby going to answer only to Harry or is he going to answer to the resistance as a whole? Also who's going to be on top Harry or Draco, or do you have something altogether different planned for them?
Any way great chapter I always look forward to the next.
Pete