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@Man-Size. I'm not sure how I feel about the H/Hr progression. It feels real, like the rest of the story but I'm very disturbed, I guess. And in THIS story, I know that Hermione is Ron's girl and Luna's is Harry, so it feels a bit wrong. Although, I certainly understand their need and desire for each other. I think you have Hermione down pat. One of the few fanfic Hermione's in an adult story that rings true from canon. It's amazing how you're taking the parameters of her character and using them to weave the story...just brilliant. It's weird to read the clinical curiosity of Hermione mixing in with her passionate lustful need to get off and escape by using Harry, and then Harry's inner thoughts and what he actually says are just OFF the fucking chain...I can't believe some of the stuff coming out of his mouth. I'm glad they're growing closer and talking to each other, but you can definitely feel Ron's absence the way they can, and again, that takes skillful writing. The end bit of this chapter was just cold as ice. Harry is a bastard, especially with that freakin' lock around his neck, and why is that so sexy to me? lol. Great chapter.

@Rid of Me. OMG. The locket...where is it? I'm worried...but glad...it's effect on Harry is truly scary. Again, very natural progression. Seeing them finally fuck was no surprised, but it hurt a little. I wonder if Ron's going to find out and how he's going to react....what I do appreciate though is how Hermione is being so distant from it, she's compartmentalized sex with Harry and that's gonna make it less messy for all three of them in the long run and that's SO Hermione. As a result, I find sex between her and Harry in THIS story to be dispassionate and just the way they're using it; as a coping mechanism. I do like how Hermione has been letting Harry push her more and more, and she's even offering things now. That's sexy in it self. Her discussion with Harry about S&M was very interesting, as was the aftermath of their coupling. It almost broke my heart when Hermione asked if she could see Luna too because she wanted to see another friend. You can definitely feel their loneliness and despair. I can't wait to find out what happened to the locket and if you're gonna take us to Godric's Hollow, should be a bit different with everything that's happened, yeah? Again, brilliant job.

@Snake Man. WOW!!! Just WOW!!! What a fucking intense chapter...I don't even know where to began...just....wow. You really outdid yourself with the layers. I mean there was an erotic undertone to it all, even when he was being nasty to her. He just exudes power and sex even in his worse moments, and I hate that you got me aroused from that. Because poor poor Luna! For Harry to just drag her deeper into her horrible past and fling it in her face like that was just...gah! Still HOT though. LOL. I know I'm sick, but you know I love me some Dark!Harry anyway. But damn. What a mind blowing chapter....the whole watersports thing isn't a big turn on but the execution of it was done very well. I'm glad all of their secrets are out and they seem to be working back to some normalcy. Harry needed to get that out of his system, and my heart was breaking for him when he told Hermione he thought maybe he shouldn't have survived. He really does bear so much. EXCELLENT chapter...one of the best in the story. You have me feeling a bit sad AND relieved that this is probably the last we'll see of Harry like this. Great writing.

What an emotional rollercoaster!! Hermione can't send Luna back in this state! (Although if she does, then maybe we might finally have a plausible explanation for once about why Luna was there in that cell at Malfoy manner. Heh.)

Sorry I missed an update. But damn!! This story just gets more and more intense. I love it.
Keep up the great work! I hope Hermione gets a chance to help Luna and Harry work things out between each other.

What an intense chapter. That was some crazy stuff Harry did to Luna. I don't know if that's what people who are into BDSM do but WOW, that was some description. That Horcrux must really be affecting him after what he said to Luna about her getting raped. I wonder what it's going to be like the next morning. How's she going to act towards him? And is Harry going to turn down the 'foreplay' a couple of notches after the Horcrux has been taken away? Maybe he won't urinate all over her next time lol.
I can't imagine how Ron would react to seeing Harry's behaviour. I can't wait to read your version of finding the sword and destroying the Horcrux. And when they go to visit Xenophilius, how is Harry going to react on finding that Luna has been taken away?

Can't wait to read more,
Please update very soon

Very interesting chapter

I do enjoy a good mindfuck and you're dealing with this Horcrux business brilliantly, although despite myself I keep expecting someone to reference Lord of the Rings... Everything was as intense as I thought it probably would be and very fittingly fast-paced. It all seems so well thought out; I can very rarely find anything to give constructive criticism on and I fear any review I make will just become request for more, so... well done on that front.

Still, pretty damn curious about the repercussions of this chapter.

[Ch 4] the paragraph where harry berates himself for the way he

[Ch 6] oh, harry....

[Ch 7] whoa. talk about conflicted. i'm not sure harry knows WHAT he wants. he enjoys luna's sweetness and demureness but wants to corrupt it at the same time. why is that? he accused her on the train of wanting to be punished by goyle and his gang, allowing it to happen, thinking she wasn't good enough to be treated well. but at the same time, look how he's treating her himself. it's okay if she's being abused...as long as he's the one doing the abusing? that seems to be how he sees it. i'm not sure he believes HE deserves better than this. i shudder to think where this slippery slope is going to end them up.

[Ch 10] ah...a turning point in their relationship? harry really needed to know that; i'm glad he does, now. i'll be interested to hear how it affects the way he treats her after this. i like the change in dudley's attitude but i have a hard time trusting that it's genuine...but if it is, i like it!