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by isisborn

person Persy
schedule January 9, 2022 at 12:00 AM

Aw, come on now, where us the rest of it!!!!???

person Persy
schedule July 20, 2021 at 12:00 AM

Where is the rest of it???!!!!

schedule February 24, 2009 at 12:00 AM
If you want your story to be a great one, then you are going to have to make the chapters a lot longer then this one. This chapter was way too short. You also need to tell the readers what the realationship is between Severus and Hermione is. Are they married? Dating? Does she just work with him? Then you need to tell more about Sam. Who is she? These are just a few suggestions. If you write longer chapters, I might actually enjoy reading it.