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Wow. This story took me totally by surprise. I am breathless in angst-filled anticipation. Is she okay? Did he do it properly? Will they ever get to kiss? Is the ninja gone for good? Where did they banish him to? The Forbidden Forest? The North Sea? Newark? OMG! Can't wait for the next chapter!!! :)

HUMPH...The Ninja only gets banished? That sucks. LOL. I was hopeing for a full out fight and bringing down of the BAD MAN! LOL...oh well. I did like this chapter anyway. Loved the last bit.

Red

Is Hermione going to show Severus her hidden potions lab? Then they can work together like he wanted to. Ninjas pending, you just can't let him die, they need to be able to work together in more ways than one! Poor Hermione, Ernie McMillan should have to suffer for what he did to her. Can't wait to read the next chapter.

Brillaint story, I'm really enjoying it. It makes a nice change for Severus to be looking for Hermione instead of the other way around! I hope he doesn't die, though!!

Okay, I confess that at first I rolled my eyes and snorted at the ninja. I mean, really? But I like it! More would be fantastic.

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Nice job! I like the way you're pacing the story...it's not like she's going to jump his bones at the first chance (although who could blame her!). Anyway, I'm enjoying this!

Excellent. Looking forward to reading the next chapter.

You my dear, are doomed. You say you don't want it to be a long and drawn out fic. I also hear you promising yourself it will only take 5 chapters. Self-deluded, sweetheart. You have a lovely fic on your hands with an exceptional plot developing (against your will possibly) and it's OBVIOUS you like writing it. You're having fun doing it, so I shall from here forward ignore the wibbling. Face it, you're writing a long and drawn out fic. Give into it. Proof? Evidence? Look at your Ch3. What happens? Hermione wakes up, makes tea, brings it to him. Conversations in between. Nothing happened to wrap up towards the conclusion. If there are only 2 more chapters and this is your mid-point, well, you've got to get a move on in advancing the story. And you're leading him into the next chapter to examine her labs, that doesn't have much to do with ninjas, meaning you hopelessly have a longer fic on your hands - SQUEE! You also spent half a page with a dandy detailing of her jumping out of bed to put her jeans on, which I adored, but is condusive to a longer fic. Oh - I'd like to register my theory right now. The blackbird flying past the window is either a familiar/animagus/whatever, but belongs to the plot, not the scenery.

Yikes, what a twisted little morality tale that's budding here, and I love the intriguing conflict. Sev thinking his assasin is justified in his pursuit, but unwilling to go without a hard fight. And Hermione looking forward to the end, when her life returns to normal, but that may be with Sev's death. Oh, and what then if the Ninja dies? Will Sev just walk away from her? Goodie! Intrigue. I love complicated plots, there's more to sink teeth into. Hmmm, but now I'm hungry for sushi... Excellent my dear, you deserve all accolades. I think the Ninja was wonderful, I don't think it's something we've ever seen. (Much like you're vulnerable Sev) Loving it!

Great so far! Love the fact that you have Severus as serious as he has ever been but he seems softer in some ways. Will you be delving into the reasons why Hermione is living a secluded life away from the Weaslys and her past with Ron. Can't wait for more. Well done!!!