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February 19, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I was taken aback by the appearance of a ninja at the start, but the tragic back-story works very well. I can't remember another story where Severus is being pursued, not by 'rogue Death Eaters' but by someone with what amounts to a legitimate grievance. Beautifully done.
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January 23, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I've read all your fics tonight. I really enjoyed each one! I hope you keep writing HP fanfiction - your writing is very original.
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April 15, 2009 at 12:00 AM
very nice, well written
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April 9, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I really enjoyed this story. The narrative never flagged drawing me in and holding me as I read your novel practically in one sitting. Part of me did laugh a bit at wizard ninja, but I have to admit I've never read of one before, so points for originality, and once he appears you make him truly scary. I liked the bits of original magic you layered in the story that help show Hermione very much Snape's equal, from her wards to her experiments to her handling of the healing spell and you make your Snape very appealing.
I do regularly look at AFF Snape/Hermione, just in case there are some overlooked gems, so it was lovely to find this here. Frankly AFF is a crap site, which is why I think you don't have the reviews you deserve. I'd highly recommend you put this on FanFictionNet, you can tame down the love scene if you're concerned it doesn't match a "R" (M for Mature on FFN which is their highest rating) I also would urge you to put this on one of the moderated archives where Snape/Hermione is popular, like Ashwinder, where you can get the audience it deserves. In that case you'd have to get it betaed (You have things like "more than efficient" when it should be "more than sufficient" and "Just help me!" She cried" - aside from the issue of Book Saidism which fanfiction moderated archives don't care about, that should be: "Just help me!" she cried. There are other things like that, which didn't for me detract from my enjoyment of the story, but you'd have to address should you post this to Ashwinder.)
I've never seen a Snape/Hermione from you before. I hope you'll continue writing in the ship.
I do regularly look at AFF Snape/Hermione, just in case there are some overlooked gems, so it was lovely to find this here. Frankly AFF is a crap site, which is why I think you don't have the reviews you deserve. I'd highly recommend you put this on FanFictionNet, you can tame down the love scene if you're concerned it doesn't match a "R" (M for Mature on FFN which is their highest rating) I also would urge you to put this on one of the moderated archives where Snape/Hermione is popular, like Ashwinder, where you can get the audience it deserves. In that case you'd have to get it betaed (You have things like "more than efficient" when it should be "more than sufficient" and "Just help me!" She cried" - aside from the issue of Book Saidism which fanfiction moderated archives don't care about, that should be: "Just help me!" she cried. There are other things like that, which didn't for me detract from my enjoyment of the story, but you'd have to address should you post this to Ashwinder.)
I've never seen a Snape/Hermione from you before. I hope you'll continue writing in the ship.
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March 18, 2009 at 12:00 AM
This was a really captivating story which I very much enjoyed reading...I hope to read more form you
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March 16, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I should have read this story since the first time you posted it. It is not at all what I was expecting. Because of the summary and the title, it lead me to believe that it was going to be full of smut. Boy was I mistaken. This is me second time typing this review. I had already typed it up, but somehow hit the wrong key and all it got deleted. I found that this fic not only contained the plot line you place on it, but that you could branch out with it to make it longer. Severus has made so many enemies over the course of his life that not just ninjas, but be after him. I am pretty sure you could expand it. Hermione I found her a little ooc, but I understand that after being hurt and taken advantaged the way she was anybody would have become a reclusive hermit. I am pretty sure that with Severus' help she would most likely gain the confidence back and they would have great adventures and more battles even if they are to keep Severus alive. I thank you so much for story. It left me with tears in my eyes. I was also so anxious as to what was going to happen. I look forward to reading more of your work. If you wish to contact me her is my address lizalya13@yahoo.com
Liz
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March 15, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Good show. I love the plot resolution, and how they worked together. The pin, rather than magic was a nice touch. Bravo.
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March 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Oh my. You made me sob! I hated their parting with a passion, and I was swearing under my breath and wishing it wasn't the end.....
Just superb writing... although there are a couple of errors during the steamy bit - 'she covered her hands with her face', should be t'other way around, and 'she kissed her cleavage' (I think that was the line)... that would be a clever bit of manouvering! But very nice and hot smut all the same!
Bravo!
Just superb writing... although there are a couple of errors during the steamy bit - 'she covered her hands with her face', should be t'other way around, and 'she kissed her cleavage' (I think that was the line)... that would be a clever bit of manouvering! But very nice and hot smut all the same!
Bravo!
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March 13, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Nice touch, I had gotten so wrapped up in the plot that I had forgotten he'd lost his wand during apparition. Very well done.
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March 13, 2009 at 12:00 AM
This was a great ending. I enjoyed reading this story.