rate_review Reviews

That last chapter made me so sad... I really do like your story and I want to see another chapter up soon. :) But here are a few things to work on. Detail! It's so important in a story. Emotion can be built up so much better with more insight to the characters thoughts and musings. And when you have a character yell you shouldn't make it all in caps lock. It should just have the exclamation mark at the end and character action in between. When Sirius yelled at Remus for "raping him" in chapter four you should have had Sirius's facial expressions or hand motions or body motions or what have you, in the text. We can infer and imagine as readers but it makes for a better story sometimes for the writer to do it themselves. But that's just my opinion. Thank you for these past two chapters and I can't wait for chapter six. Keep up the nice work. :)

Just found your fic today. Love the story, but just a request please. Longer chapters!!!!!!!!!!

Can't wait for next update.

OMG!!! Poor Remus!!! *hugs* waahh I wanna know more!

I think that may be the hottest S/R sex scene I've ever read.

You're welcome. :) This chapter was interesting as well but I felt like you could have expanded more with the whole... Bathroom scenario. Put a little more narrative from Remus and what have you. But I enjoyed it and when it comes right down to it that's what matters I think. Anyway, I look foreword to seeing what you'll be putting up next. So keep on trying and keep on writing. I'll be waiting for course. ;)

Hmmm... Interesting. -nods- Very interesting. Continue?