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May 31, 2009 at 12:00 AM
More smut, and to mold it up humor and drama. Love the humor on Lucius account of course. That would make it memorable.
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May 31, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I loved the bouquet at the end....make sure to include the flowers' meanings in the next chapter. Also, kudos on Draco's feelings. Most 17-year-olds wouldn't want parenthood at that age. Even if they're filthy rich pure-bloods. Thanks for making him realistic. Can't wait for the next update! :D
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April 18, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Awww, that's beautiful! I love this story, so please update soon!
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April 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I love this fic!
Your grammar and spelling is pretty goood but this chapter seemed a bit rushed. I don't think it detracted from the story line much but maybe if you paragraphed a bit more and had each sentence of dialogue in a seperate line it would come across a bit more smoothly? I dunno it's your fic and is up to you but you did ask for an assessment so I've chucked in my two knuts...lol
Great work and leep up the good work!
Your grammar and spelling is pretty goood but this chapter seemed a bit rushed. I don't think it detracted from the story line much but maybe if you paragraphed a bit more and had each sentence of dialogue in a seperate line it would come across a bit more smoothly? I dunno it's your fic and is up to you but you did ask for an assessment so I've chucked in my two knuts...lol
Great work and leep up the good work!
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April 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
OMG this story is like making me all teary eyed and what not!!! I need more please.... oh my heavens!!!!
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April 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Yay for Easter break and time to update your story. LOL Happy Easter to you, too. :)
Ah to imagine Draco's face at the thought of Harry or Ron picking his child's name - especially if it turned out to be one he liked. I'm surprised Narcissa hasn't suggested a star one since that's what they're named after, constellations and the like. :)
Aw how cool to have a holographic image of your baby like that. 4D images are cool, but not that cool.
Oh Draco, you have to make it clear to your friends how you feel about Hermione and the baby. Hermione did it for you, you great dolt!! Oh what are Blaise and Pansy going to think when they get that note inviting them to think of baby names?????? Clearly they don't believe what Draco told them the second time around.
Aww, the baby kicked! That's so beautiful, what a lovely way to get them talking to eachother again. :) Loved it!!!! :)
Ah to imagine Draco's face at the thought of Harry or Ron picking his child's name - especially if it turned out to be one he liked. I'm surprised Narcissa hasn't suggested a star one since that's what they're named after, constellations and the like. :)
Aw how cool to have a holographic image of your baby like that. 4D images are cool, but not that cool.
Oh Draco, you have to make it clear to your friends how you feel about Hermione and the baby. Hermione did it for you, you great dolt!! Oh what are Blaise and Pansy going to think when they get that note inviting them to think of baby names?????? Clearly they don't believe what Draco told them the second time around.
Aww, the baby kicked! That's so beautiful, what a lovely way to get them talking to eachother again. :) Loved it!!!! :)
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April 13, 2009 at 12:00 AM
What first!? aaaahhh..... LOVED THE CHAPTER!!!! YEAH AN UPDATE!!!! well every man has to endure the silent treatment--at least-- once in thier lives! :) right? ;P well harry and draco are getting to know each other better, totally love that. cissa and hermione are really doing well together. and baby will bring them closer together!!!! :) i so do look forward for the next update!!!! please dont be too long! (if you can help it.) Thanks for the update! :)
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April 13, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Lovely their first fight as a couple in waiting.... Cute ending by the way!!!!
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April 13, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Awww. See? Babies DO make everything better! lol Great update, I can't wait for more.
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April 13, 2009 at 12:00 AM
If they both have money (Draco, more than Hermione) and they are now determined to dwell together. Why don't they either a) Get a bigger place or b) Expand the place they have magically? If I remember correctly, there are spells that can make rooms bigger without affecting the exterior of the building. Heck, Hogwarts is always creating more rooms on its own. And there are trunks with living spaces in them.