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August 12, 2009 at 12:00 AM
i like it so far are you ever going to add on
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April 3, 2009 at 12:00 AM
This looks like the beging of a great story. please continue pppppppppppllllllllllllllllleeeeeeeeeeeaaaaaaaaassseeeeeeeeee
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February 2, 2009 at 12:00 AM
This is a great start. I look forward to reading more.
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February 2, 2009 at 12:00 AM
You have a nice idea here but the dialogue just didnt sount like Hermione or Severus. I'm just not sure I can really see or hear Hermione chanting, "Baby, Oh Baby" or something along those lines when with Severus like that. That might just be me personally but I had trouble reading after that. As I said you have a nice idea but I think the dialogue could use a bit of work, you might want to look into getting a beta reader or even someone who is just a second set of eyes and ears you can bounce ideas off of.
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February 1, 2009 at 12:00 AM
just from reading your summery and chaptrer one am guessing molly is going to be one big bitch in this story. and is going try to and make hermione date ron or she will tell everyone that hermione is seeing severus.
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February 1, 2009 at 12:00 AM
hermione's age in book 5 after her birthday she is 16 she was born in 79 and if she used the time tuner it would make her 17
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February 1, 2009 at 12:00 AM
wow that was great