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January 31, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I need to know why they parted.
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January 31, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Wow. Good start so far. It was sad at the end, when Harry was crying. Too many emotions flying around for him. I hope he can make it. :)
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January 31, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Well that last chapter was a little bit confusing what with the sudden jump back to memory form but other than that I'm absolutely loving this story so far! The tension, the confusion, the banter! Brilliant and oh-so-in-character! Looking forward to more,
Stef
Stef
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January 31, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Im loving the story idea.
Only thing with it, i sometimes lose track of the conversation, who's saying what. In some instances I think you have had seperate lines for each speaker, then you'll put both speakers on one line then back to seperate...if that makes sense. it just gets a little confusing at times
Fab concept though :) & Ill def keep reading :)
Only thing with it, i sometimes lose track of the conversation, who's saying what. In some instances I think you have had seperate lines for each speaker, then you'll put both speakers on one line then back to seperate...if that makes sense. it just gets a little confusing at times
Fab concept though :) & Ill def keep reading :)
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January 31, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Wow, I really like your story line. Your plot is very good. I love the details of Harry's emotions. I hope you update soon.