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good story - I was wondering if you ever did the other version - I think both would be good

This was an awesome story. I never expected that ending. I am glad I read it.
xoxo,
kitkat

yay!!!!!!!!!!!!! you let her live!!!!!!!!

loved it and i can't wait to read temper's story.

This is a really compelling story - but, and there is a 'but', it deserves better than the errors you have left in it before posting. Grimmwald place? Askaban? Bealtrix Lestrange? Come on! Spelling errors are one thing, but to get key details wrong like that is sloppy. You obviously intended writing this for other Potter fans, so grant us the courtesy of using the correct names. That said, your idea is very original, and you've nicely established the interaction between the characters (despite the departure from canon). The grammar is fine, but you really do need to use the spellcheck to pick up your typo's.

When I stumbled across this fic you already had six chapters posted, and I haven't had a chance to see any other reviews yet before putting mine up - I do hope you will understand that I'm not attacking your imagination or your intention, but if you are going to achieve the potential that is plainly in you, positive criticism is essential. Great writers don't just happen, like anything else it only gets better with practice, but how would any of us learn if no one tells us where we're going wrong?

Best wishes, and now I only have to wait eagerly for the next chapter.

Oh - and p.s. for what it's worth - I vote Life too...

'Purr

Let it live!!! Or make harry pregnant now after that fabulous romp. I also thought, what if they transported the baby to another body that HAD an active womb... Like harry. Thus everyone is happy. Harry gets to be the Omega, they get a family and the baby lives... Awesome story

Save it please!!! Its just too cruel otherwise! I know life is cruel, but this is fanfiction!

OH wow I love this story!!! I vote for the child to die, I think the story will be better that way, the proposed story line for that sounds better than the other one. This is so hot, I totally love it! I really like the scenes where Moony's werewolf nature comes out and things get rough... so hot!

hello I love your fic. I really love if the child live and I suggest Harry to be pregnant. it's hot. thank you. bye see you soon

why not. have the kid live and in the process well he did just take two on... don't see why we cant have more on the way lol. thanks for sharing cant wait to see what comes next.

Save the baby please don't put Harry though that.
Keep up with the updates I like this story.
Mira