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by MariaTeresaQuintanar

schedule January 26, 2009 at 12:00 AM
This was a great story! I loved how you wrote Hermione. She was strong and knew her mind, yet wasn't so out of character as to shut herself off mentally because of what she went through.

Tiffany
person Little B
schedule January 26, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I can't help but feel that you ended up with a different story than was originally intended. Lucius' punishment was a great beginning. It seemed like we'd get a very dark and angsty story. I feel like there needed to be a bridge between the punishment and him falling for Hermione.

Overall, it was an entertaining, although rushed and uneven story. I found the terrible half of the Weasleys to be quite fun. Lucius was, of course, gummy. And, the ending was sweet!
schedule January 26, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Cute story with some sassy smut.

I like that it was short too.
schedule January 26, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Loved it, and was amazed at how quickly you updated! Now i'm spoiled and waiting for your next one, I guess.
person Little B
schedule January 26, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Ack!! I meant "yummy" not "gummy"! Good grief :)
schedule January 25, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Severus is a very wise man, and I'm glad to see it. I'd say Hermione's version of the Hammurabic code has produced a far more interesting Lucius and Draco as well. Good chapters, and I can hardly wait for more!
person Anon
schedule January 24, 2009 at 12:00 AM
sounds interesting....i'm in....! more please
person Ithilwen
schedule January 24, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Great chapters.. But I feel you are moving a bit fast..
But anyway, Keep it up!
person savigar
schedule January 24, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Ooh, I'm liking this. Lucius and Hermione with a delicious serving of Severus, very nice. Going on to chapter 3...
person savigar
schedule January 24, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Just finished Chapter 3, and I'm really enjoying your take on Hermione. I also find myself hoping for all three of my favorite characters (Lucius, Hermione, and Severus) to find a way to, um, accomodate each other. On to chapter 4...