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Wow another amazing chapter!! I loved Dracos reaction to it all i can just imagin it :D I love this pairing of Draco/hermione/pansy i wish there was more fics with them together i had never thought about them three together but after reading the last couple of chapters i must say that im looking out for more fics!! Can't wait for you to update with more and looking forward to the next chapter :D

"Hermione slept exceedingly little after her panty-related realization" - What a great opening line to Chapter 3. Hermione's reaction to the appearance of the letter on the table was great as was the letter itself. She's sending a just-in-case scroll of hers out at midnight if she doesn't disable it? Hermione dear, Pansy is going to need more than two hours with you, so I hope you can disable it from the RoR because you wouldn't want to have to explain yourself to your friends and professors.

And so it begins. Wow, what a hot, hot scene. Hermione surprised me once again by turning around and attacking Pansy. Didn't think Pansy would be the first to come the first time. I love that Draco is hiding somewhere in the room unknown to Hermione. I love Pansy's dirty talk, which is the perfect level of dirty. And the use of the word "defile". Yum.

One thing that I didn't care for is the switching between Hermione and Pansy's points of view during the scene. The switch even happened in the same paragraph. (Hermione feeling a jold of arousal/Pansy hearing Draco's moan.) I'm loving the story, but this is a pet peeve of mine (especially in femslash), so I hope you're okay with me saying so.

"That didn't exactly go as I had planned - it's far past time to correct that." Okay, I cannot wait until the next chapter!!

of course I'm keeping track - your story is far to hot not to ;)
besides, there aren't many authors letting their characters have squirting orgasms...wonder why?

looking forward to the next chap!

xx
Jenn

so i just discovered this fic and i i loovee it. its such a hot pairing i had never thought of. plus the M/F/F pics seem to be harder to find on this site, so i am so pleased to find this one. Anyway, I really like it, and i'm really curious to see where its all going. please post more soon!

Interesting and well written, though u should take more time describing Hermione's emotions and her thinking.

The involvement of Pansy Parkinson just makes the whole story so much more interesting! Such creativity you have. I will be checking this frequently so I don't miss the following chapters! Hope you will be updating this as soon as possible!

my, my, my.

Me likes, you know?

I like Hermione's attitude, and that little fact of her turning the tables.

I have one little doubt, I couldn't help but notice that the charm is going to get off at 12... and she got there at 9... she is going to manage to take it off, isn't she?

This is very hot!!!!!!!!!!! I can wait what you have plan for these 3 coming on the next chapters.. The only request is to make this fic as long as you like and let your imagination fly .... you are doing great so far.. Lourdes

Wow... I mean, wow. That was bloody brilliant! I love that you started her with Pansy, so damn hot. I don't find it unrealistic at all that Hermione would know what to do. When you know what feels good, apply that and if it doesn't quite hit the spot, half the fun is in exploring...

I bet Draco is having a good time in the corner and I can't wait to see what happens next. Very hot, you say? Woo and hoo!

Leaving concrit in a review is generally not the done thing. For a piece that has not been beta read, this is pretty solid. What parts of your writing do you want to work on to improve?