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April 4, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story. Its not rushed and is very believable. I hope to be able to follow it if you have a list you can send out. I wish AFF had some kind of subscription option like FFN. Thanks for taking the time and effort to write this story for us to read and share. I'm looking forward to reading more.
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April 4, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Oh i really do hope you update soon!!!! i love this fic!
absolutely love this version of draco hee hee.
i wonder whats gonna happen when harry finds out draco is his secret admirer. : )
hope to see an update of the next chapter soon. cant wait!!! so looking forward to it!!!!!!! : )
absolutely love this version of draco hee hee.
i wonder whats gonna happen when harry finds out draco is his secret admirer. : )
hope to see an update of the next chapter soon. cant wait!!! so looking forward to it!!!!!!! : )
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April 4, 2009 at 12:00 AM
ok, so I had started to read this story a couple of times before and for some reason never followed through...so glad I finally have gotten caught up, because I really really like it so far and can't wait to read more :-)
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February 26, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Soooo need chapter 6!!!!
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February 18, 2009 at 12:00 AM
So glad you updated!!! Can't wait till the next chapter!!!! I hope it's soon!
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February 11, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Heather,
You've done a good job so far. Of course, you know how I am, there are a ton of recommendations I could make. All of those aside though, you do know what you're doing. You can let me know if you want to hear me go chapter by chapter. For now, I just want to say two things: First, I would like it very much if you picked up Techniques of the Selling Writer by Dwight V. Swain, either from the bookstore or the library. You can use the library's website to have it sent for, I've done it tons of times. If you really enjoy reading about writing, then pick up Stephen King's On Writing also. These will give you tools to really polish your work. Talent is great, and you've got it, but when talent is refined and honed through practice and study, it becomes truly powerful. My second idea is that you give Draco nipple rings instead of a belly button ring. Just because Draco is gay and secretly has a soft spot for Harry doesn't mean you have to sacrifice any of his masculinity. After all, the beauty of the male is in masculinity, is it not? Just as the beauty of a woman is in her femininity. Plenty of guys like butterflies without getting tattoos/piercings that show them off. The nipple rings give you the little kink of piercings, plus it will give them something to play with. The belly button is hardly as erotic as the nipples. Just a suggestion.
Don't freak at this note. I'm still your same friend.
Jay
P.S. - It does need some copyediting. There are just a few grammar/spelling issues that need to be cleaned up. Sometimes we spend so much time thinking about the content that we miss the small stuff. Honestly, I only get them all on a revision if someone else has read my work. Even then, mistakes can be missed. Talk to you later. :)
You've done a good job so far. Of course, you know how I am, there are a ton of recommendations I could make. All of those aside though, you do know what you're doing. You can let me know if you want to hear me go chapter by chapter. For now, I just want to say two things: First, I would like it very much if you picked up Techniques of the Selling Writer by Dwight V. Swain, either from the bookstore or the library. You can use the library's website to have it sent for, I've done it tons of times. If you really enjoy reading about writing, then pick up Stephen King's On Writing also. These will give you tools to really polish your work. Talent is great, and you've got it, but when talent is refined and honed through practice and study, it becomes truly powerful. My second idea is that you give Draco nipple rings instead of a belly button ring. Just because Draco is gay and secretly has a soft spot for Harry doesn't mean you have to sacrifice any of his masculinity. After all, the beauty of the male is in masculinity, is it not? Just as the beauty of a woman is in her femininity. Plenty of guys like butterflies without getting tattoos/piercings that show them off. The nipple rings give you the little kink of piercings, plus it will give them something to play with. The belly button is hardly as erotic as the nipples. Just a suggestion.
Don't freak at this note. I'm still your same friend.
Jay
P.S. - It does need some copyediting. There are just a few grammar/spelling issues that need to be cleaned up. Sometimes we spend so much time thinking about the content that we miss the small stuff. Honestly, I only get them all on a revision if someone else has read my work. Even then, mistakes can be missed. Talk to you later. :)
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February 9, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Love it so far, so wheres the rest?
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February 7, 2009 at 12:00 AM
DRACO GOT A BUTTERFLY BELLY BUTTON ??? BUT THAT'S... SO... SOO...... CUTE!!!
but that is soo.... bottom... is he gonna be bottoming soon??!!
but that is soo.... bottom... is he gonna be bottoming soon??!!
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February 6, 2009 at 12:00 AM
HAHAHAHAHA!!!! I Love this story!!!!! It just makes me giggle! And then I totally freaked out on the part where Harry sends a letter to his penpal about him!!!! I like it!
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February 6, 2009 at 12:00 AM
aww! i want more harry/draco fluff and definitely more of the harry/draco sex!